When you ask,
I will tell you
this poem is
a crystal globe,
awaiting the dawn
of your forehead.
My metaphors
shout for the coat hanger
your voice would bring
to arrange them
back in the closet.
Still yes,
it is you –
I can’t forget how nights would creep
beneath window flesh, there were stains
of your laughter on the panes that summer.
I took my life
to the laundromat
but it came back yellow from creativity,
wood, and your name. I wanted to sing
with Dido about coins and goodbyes,
sing you away like a flat note
choked from my throat. But in the way you
hated her lyrics was the loneliness
of silence, silence when I wouldn’t have minded
if the seventh color had been a bit
shallow. My prism had dried, I thought. The pillow
fell ill with empathy.
Wrong!
My piece of heaven, then you –
turned the nights in. After a trial and a few earthquakes,
we could have been Japan again, I could have
gambled and won the rice of sanity
back.
If only
you didn’t nickname your new moon
a still yes.
It is sad like a winter afternoon
that everyone else
knows.
Author notes
Thursday, March 13, 2008
A contest entry
- The Things You Never Said... by xxRainbowDawnxx.
700 points, ended March 18, 2008, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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yes...it's very good
Excellent metaphors -your poetry is always filled with excellent metaphor & such a creative journey. Love this
best of luck in the contest


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I found it hard to understand, but the parts that I did understand I thought were lovely. I loved the lines, 'beneath window flesh, there were stains' such tragic but beautiful imagery here.


