without a word
she said all
there was to say-
her silence searing.
no words came,
I dared not reach out.
Her heaving back-
a fortress
I could not conquer.
A contest entry
- Invite Only for the following people: by mysticstorm.
475 points, ended March 19, 2008, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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a sadness reaches inside a grabs hold of the heart as the silence settles in...no turning back, no winning...sighs...beautiful and well with the silver...thank you for sharing
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Very clever with the dual meaning title...
Without a word she said all there was to say, silence combined with body language can speak volumes,
bravo on this,
galfalfa
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LIKE LIKE LIKE LIKE.....LOVE
love it, love the picture with it...i love the last 3 lines.
"her heaving back-
a fortress
i could not conquer."
i can see the picture so clearly...a fight...the end, of something, the night or the love, a woman crying and a man unable to console her from that specific pain. i don't know what the prompt was, but i love this poem. i love that it can mean what i want it to mean to me.
LOVE LOVE LOVE it.
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Well done!
I love the brevity and the line
"she said all ther was to say her silence searing."
Ouch..how many times have we experienced the burn!??!
Good luck on the enrty!
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like it
i like how you say there is no turning back, i like your take on the promt, good luck in the contest, keep writing, -Amy
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Beautifully felt in emotions and truth of the power of silence...deeply moving and sad...nicely done...
thank you for entering!
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