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Vampire's lament

Dark skies,lonely nights
In pain and blood she dies
Night after night

in my dreams

and memories 

Tell me why would I desire eternity to be alone?
I loved her...
and only her
and now I'm eternally...
immortal.
Scent of decaying flesh close,
Raindrops seem red to me once I've been content
though not for long
and when the effect's gone I'm lonely again.
I miss all the warmth, the sun of you eyes
the smell of your skin, your breath as you sleep...


NO MORE COMPLAIN!


I'm empty! My soul died with you
I'm gonna be the fear of human world,
dark god in the shadows,
the lord of Night and I shall only bring Death

Author notes

For once I've promissed to write something for you and here it is you might not understand it but it is what you have inside. Promisses to keep

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  • Well Done

    It was different, and kinda caught me off guard a lot. I enjoyed reading it fully and thanks for entering my contest.

  • zombietom
    December 14, 2008

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    Beautiful word and line structure, not to mention a sweet subject matter. I love all things creepy, crawly, spooky, and especially undead. Truly an accurate depiction of what a lusty and lonely vampire must feel like after they've found the one.

    The NO MORE COMPLAIN! line took my by surprise, honestly I'm not sure how I feel about it.


    Loved the ending. Real horror show!

    Great write, mucho kudos

  • Mysterioso
    March 16, 2008

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    Very nice. The sadness into the wrath of one who found so much only to lose it all to thier curse of immortality, very nicely writte


  • Silenced-Shadow
    March 16, 2008

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    i like your imagry in this poem its very well done, the lonelyness of the abyss of eternety is very well expressed,


  • VoltaicHypnosis
    March 14, 2008

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    OK Im sorry but NO MORE THAN TEN LINES! I've sworn not to read em if they arent ten lines of script. Please update it... Im sure it rocks.

  • DarkRomantic113
    March 13, 2008
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    This is a great depiction of vampires.

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