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Inquisition

 

 

 

 

 

Sounds of sin from maddest of minds
Trials of torture amidst sobs of sorrow
Burnt blood, bile in death's decay
Salvation's sacrifice purged and pure
Lost lives lay, proud priests pray
Starkly save tears 'till tomorrow
Sounds of sin from maddest of minds

Sanctified saviors of God's great grace

Heavenly heinous acts thought pious and pure
Mothers murdered, fathers fallen
Chopping children's hands with swift wicked whacks
Pitiful poor ends endured
Crusade at Christ's behest befallen
Sanctified saviors of God's great grace

Demons delight in soul suffering sights
Vanities victory o'er ignorant ills
Delicious delirium's false face
Secretly savoring Christ's calamity
Evil's embrace dogma's disgrace
Pope's powerful faithful future fulfills
Demons delight in soul suffering sights

The true tragedy is when judges get judged
Burning bright lights of truth, when wrong and right are revealed
Self-scanctimony ruefully recalled
The tragic truth brought to bear in their sorry sights
All are appalled, their corrupt crimes called
With shocking sorrow their feindish fates are sealed
The true tragedy is when judges get judged

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Alliterisen

1st line- x syllables
2nd line- x+2 syllables
3rd line- x-1 syllables
4th line- (x+2)-1 syllables
5th line- x-2 syllables
6th line- (x+2)-2 syllables
7th line- x syllables

which allows for infinite syllable sequences. Listed below are examples of the syllable
sequences used.

Rhyme scheme (guide)
L1-A L2 b+c L3-d L4-b L5-d+d L6-c L7-A
Note that line 4 rhymes with an internal word in line 2.
Sequence #1:

1st line- 8 syllables
2nd line- 10 syllables
3rd line- 7 syllables
4th line- 9 syllables
5th line- 6 syllables
6th line- 8 syllables
7th line- 8 syllables (same as first)

Sequence #2:

1st line- 9 syllables
2nd line- 11 syllables
3rd line- 8 syllables
4th line- 10 syllables
5th line- 7 syllables
6th line- 9 syllables
7th line- 9 syllables (same as first)

Sequence #3:

1st line- 10 syllables
2nd line- 12 syllables
3rd line- 9 syllables
4th line- 11 syllables
5th line- 8 syllables
6th line- 10 syllables
7th line- 10 syllables (same as first)

Sequence #4:

1st line- 11 syllables
2nd line- 13 syllables
3rd line- 10 syllables
4th line- 12 syllables
5th line- 9 syllables
6th line- 11 syllables
7th line- 11 syllables (same as first)


Worst darkest thing that came to mind.

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  • CitrineSunrise silver member
    April 9, 2008

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    I am sure you followed the form perfectly, but the words stood on their own. It is appalling what evils have been justified in the name of religion. History is rife with examples and the tragedy continues to this day. Beware of those who purport to hear their own special message from God. There is a very thin line between fervor and madness. Congratulations on your gold trophy. Peace, Liz


  • breedluv gold member
    April 9, 2008
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    Congratulations on the well-deserved gold!


  • howlinginpain
    April 9, 2008
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    GOLD! Congrats on winning my contest! You certainly deserved it, this poem is superb.


  • howlinginpain
    April 8, 2008

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    "Secretly savoring Christ's calamity" --this is a great line. This form is way too complicated. I am supremely impressed what you did with it. This piece is excellent and well worth reading twice (or thrice). Thank you for entering and good luck!


  • maa gold member
    March 27, 2008

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    sigh ...
    it is not easy to face the abyss of horror and realize the human mind's potentiality of perversity ... you have gone deep into the collective unconsciousness to retrieve those pieces of aberration that lie dormant - unable to dissolve into the light of love ...

    I rarely read dark poetry, but wish to express my respect to you for having been willing to face what most of us are afraid to face ...

    blessings,
    maa


  • bones7
    March 21, 2008
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    Great job,I love alliterations and you pulled it off great.


  • RyanosaurusWrecks
    March 20, 2008

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    your effort is definatly sprawled across this write, and ive noticed....having said that, i do wish you the best of luck, for your flow is impeccable

  • Amarige
    March 16, 2008

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    Very beautiful dark write..sorry I just came back to comment..the form is excellent..and amazing..that takes a lot of talent my friend..great piece!
    Ruby


  • Dalaney gold member
    March 15, 2008

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    a very light a cheery poem....



    No, seriously, this is brutally dark and masterfully designed. There is no question about your poetic ability, dear Poet...none whatsoever. I am very impressed. Love, Lane


  • Amera gold member
    March 14, 2008

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    I love the form, yet the rale is so terrifying and captivating I didn't bother to count syllables or check the structure. You have created a masterpiece in the macabre; I love it. Wonderful wotk!

    Love,
    Amera

  • Papagallo
    March 13, 2008

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    Most Terrifying

    I did not count syllables. Your notes gave my head a spin. I read your work and really enjoyed the depth in which you went. That Inquestion was really horrible. I was taught by the SSND, Jesuits, Christian Brothers, and they all seemed to like to inflict a little pain and suffering in their punishment and way of teaching. Well, they will answer one day. Again, thanks for sharing your work.


  • XxGoldenxXDawnxX
    March 13, 2008
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    Wow.. evil sinners repent. All the true believers thou shalt be saved in Christ!!!


  • StarEyes
    March 13, 2008

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    Ok, I loved this write, totally intrigueing, but got lost in your author's notes

    This is fantastic!! When you spill your ink, it is no holds barre! And that is one reason, why you have become one of my favorite favorite's to read!

    Best of luck in this contest!!!

    *clap**clap**clap*


    • PerVirtuous
      March 13, 2008
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      I put them in because it is CricketJeff's contest and I know it bugs him.


  • Ithica silver member
    March 13, 2008

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    The only thing worse than this poetic vision of darkness.... the apocolypse, maybe!!! I think I need my morning offee to comprehend the syllable sequences etc... But there was NO WAY to miss your point!


  • Mandy4Men
    March 13, 2008

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    That is frighteningly dark. I think I like the poetry, but very hard to isolate it from the contents, and I do not like that at all. Interesting to read I think.

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