My whoring heart
Auctioned off to the highest bidder,
Following whims and dreams
Searching for fulfillment
Can I be redeemed?
Author notes
Hosea 6:1
Anemone by Leander
A contest entry
- 20 Words by Perfectly Imperfect.
450 points, ended March 30, 2008, 39 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - anything goes 10 lines of poetry by tony yates.
600 points, ended March 29, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give Me Your Very Best!!!!!--contestant vote by TabbyCat.
600 points, ended May 8, 2008, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Brevity At Its Best!!! by delightfulmess.
700 points, ended May 13, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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The answer is sure you can.
Love the flow of this piece well done.
Thank you for entering my contest.
Delila -
excellent opening line - very powerful
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I absolutely love your starting line here. A very short poem that carries a lot of power with it because of that first line that starts with a bang actually
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nice. good luck in the contest.
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This is sad, I think but short, sweet and true.
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nice work
this had a great 'ring' to it well done and thanks -
Intense piece, superbly penned. All the best in the contest with it
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This is very powerful. Effective and emotive in few words, definitely one of my favourites Well done and thank you for entering x
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Whoah. Nice use of those twenty words, Churt. It grabs my attention from the first word to the last. One thing I might adjust is the double use of the word "for." usually they don't like it when you use the same word twice in these quickies. Maybe "Auctioned off?"
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