She sits crunching
crusts-
pensive
in pretty pink pyjamas.
Long
lustrous locks
swathe beautiful bra - less
breasts
in glorious golden
curls.
Crumby plates
of egg yolk pile up
around her
arse-
which farts.
All
the fucking
time.
Author notes
FLOORBOARDS
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A contest entry
- anything goes 10 lines of poetry by tony yates.
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This was an interesting piece, what inspired it? -
What the hell???
Now this was ju7st too damn funny, very well done. Thank you for taking the time to enter the "Fight for the Gold" contest, it is appreciated. Best of luck in the judging... Scott 
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Haha that is awesome !
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Thanks.
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Hilarious! My husband would appreciate this one...
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This is disgusting poetry. The kind I was looking for.
When thy warm sweat should leave me cold,
And my worn soul find out no bliss
In the obscenities I kiss,
And the things shameful that I hold.
My nostrils sniff the luxury
Of flesh decaying, bowels torn
Of festive worms, like Venus, born
Of entrails foaming like the sea.
Yea, thou art dead. Thy buttocks now
Are swan-soft, and thou sweatest not;
And hast a strange desire begot
In me, to lick thy bloody brow;
To gnaw thy hollow cheeks, and pull
Thy lustful tongue from out it's sheath;
To wallow in the bowels of death,
And rip thy belly, and fill full
My hands with all putridities;
To chew thy dainty testicles;
To revel with the worms in Hell's
Delight in such obscenities;
To pour within thine heart the seed
Mingled with poisonous discharge
From a swollen gland, inflamed and large
With gonorrhoea's delicious breed;
To probe thy belly, and to drink
The godless fluids, and the pool
Of rank putrescence from the stool
Thy hanged corpse gave, whose luscious stink
Excites these songs sublime. The rod
Gains new desire; dive, howl, cling, suck,
Rave, shreik, and chew; excite the f**k,
Hold me, I come! I'm dead! My God! -
This is a strange poem. I think it needs more added to it and it need to be loosened up. That's just my opinion.
Alyssa
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its alliterative and unexpected, a very nice piece, but i cant help feeling it doesnt say enough. no major faults. just stiff competition.
thank you for the entry.
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It seems so delicate and pretty until you start talking about farting, such a twist from the start of this poem. amazingly well written.
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Such emaculate imagery and you had to go and crack the shell and expose yer bloody egg whites like a liquor-ish twist. Yer like butter I say... on a roll.
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OMG! Hilarious. (Hey, you are the chef - wise up and quit feeding her so many eggs!)
This seems like a poem written about the phase in a relationship JUST after the "honeymoon" is over.
The contest called for something action packed and adventurous - you delivered! - NANGALEEMA
P.S. My daughter is five - very sweet - with silky, beautiful, long golden hair and big blue eyes. She's adorable in all other ways except that she will pause mid sentence, cock her hip sideways and let one RIP! Then laugh and laugh. We can't break her from it!
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OH MY GOSH!! You sucked me right in with this little gem. It starts off so romantic and descriptive and then wham! .... You have quite the wit young man! Well done my friend. Good luck in the contest.
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wonderful
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LMAO Brilliant! All the best in the contest with it
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Ha I totally get it - love it!
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Thank you for your interest and entry
my concern is that some may rather not comment if suprised.
As a sidenote, be sure to comment each entry, per guidelines
thanks again, and have a great day
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I see you've edited your comment, any chance you could maybe say something about my poem?
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being eight thirty am here, i have mostly just woke up...so as to your messages, if you want a critique, ill give you one.
however, for this contest, im not going to tell you if yours is good or not, just say great write, and thank you.
you have to understand, i KNOW what shit poetry is, i just am not the person to discourage the reader, so being an open contest, all are welcome.
To withdraw your poem makes me sad indeed, you should reenter, if the contest is a popularity contest, you, Floorboards, im sure, can win it, as your friends and works are strewn all across this site.
And if it is a talent contest, well then, what really is stopping you.
To sum it up, i do apologize for not responding to you quickly, do not get discouraged, and your poem is fine with me, full of descriptions with the ability to transport the reader to his/her own chair at the breakfast table.
A big suprise effect at the end also...
-ryan
p.s.
oh, as a sidenote, by labling adult, i meant in your title, but its not a requirement
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Heh. I love the descriptions... But, really... I think the cursing is unnecessary and crude.
But, that doesn't take away from the goodness of the poem
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i give it to you...women ain't the best and neither are men. but i like this. great write and please return the favor.
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Very nice imagery. I love your style here. Good luck in the contest. You certainly have a decent start!
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great write. But not all women are like this. Kinda reminds me of my dad though except for the femine parts.
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Interesting. The guys in my family seem to have that problem...lol....maybe we all need to cut the eggs out of our diet?...lol
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Hmmm, I have the same complaint about guys. Not to mention they are always "adjusting" themselves. That is so pretty.
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I don't think I want to meet her!
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this is a very strang. but i do like it. who is this about if you don't mind me asking? but i like it. keep it up. you got me hooked.
KNIGHT TIME
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