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My Hands

I looked at them today,

really looked at them,

the backs are rough

 

terrain, with converging  

blue roads leading

nowhere, fingers are

 

off ramps into the past,

present and with any luck,

a bright future.

 

There are a few scars

looking like quick and

shoddy repairs.

 

Oh the things these digits have

done, places traveled,

mysteries unraveled and then

 

there are the delicate caresses

given and many more

I hope to come.

 

Love and life have

slipped through these

fingers more than once and

 

unfortunately, death

has left stains, with memories

never to be washed away.

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Max Alexandersson
    September 6
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    Spot on. Congrats. Kinda late. I know. It's good. Anyway.


  • malmadre gold member
    April 16
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    Ah! I remember this one.


  • soulfultia gold member
    April 15

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    The Gold and Silver fit quite comfortably on this page, excellent penning! Found this thought provoking and reflective. Wonderful work poet ~Tia


  • BearWoman gold member
    April 11

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  • requiempoet gold member
    March 28

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    I always look at hands, particularly man hands. They tell a story. It's like a epic tale of the tribulations or the trials that we have endured over our lifetime. Again very nice! You're a great poetic mind.


  • Emmyb gold member
    March 17

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    congratulations

    Congratulations on this perfectly stunning, creative and heart-felt write. Im surprised I hadnt read it yet!
    I can see its won two trophies too - well done.

    My hands do not have many war wounds. but plenty of delicate caresses. :-)


  • Rheea gold member
    March 6
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    I liked this how calm you write about life and how it deals .


  • worshipchick
    March 5
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    Congrats on the wins- most definitely deserved! I really enjoyed this piece. :-) Such a great idea for a poem and you executed it masterfully. What a cool testimony to your life. Structurally I loved the way you chose your line breaks- really adds something to the read. Awesome write! Blessings! :-)


  • Gwenevere
    March 1

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    Yet those stains bring with them memories of the good times also and remind us to cherish what we have whilst we still can.We can't wash away memories good or bad but would we want too.These are lessons we have learnt along the way
    and we carry them in the palm of our hand , within our own special book of life, Ros


  • jenadyleigh silver member
    February 22

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    you write beautifully! As a poet I am usually full of words, but other then stunning brilliant and perfect, I have now. WOW well done! Well done.

  • malmadre gold member
    February 19

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    This is a well deserved trophy! hands are like a roadmap with life lines and heart lines being the roads we've traveled. "converging blue roads" "off ramps" I really like the metaphors used. Love and life slipping through the fingers, I've been down that road too.
    Hands that can be so firmly grasping at life, can also take life away.

    "unfortunately, death

    has left stains, with memories

    never to be washed away."
    I am reminded of the hands of a soldier, duties and deeds that left a deeper mark in the mind. This poem offers many sides to the hands, I like the short lines, much like fleeting thoughts that you captured, before they became more complicated and went to places that would have been more painful.


  • DolceVito gold member
    February 13

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    Extraordinary write, well-deserved trophy...Believe it or not, I've looked at my hands many times and thought about writing a similar piece...Some day, maybe.


  • angelli803
    February 8
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    beautiful...

    just simply a beautifully etched write...

    *awed*


  • Kiss the girl--x
    February 4

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    'blue roads leading
    nowhere, fingers are

    off ramps into the past,
    present and with any luck,
    a bright future. '

    i do that sometimes, like just really really really look hard at my hands, hands are strange when you look at them for too long, especially fingers and thumbs. that's not really relevant =/ but anyways...
    this was beautiful, really delicate whilst full of strong images, brilliant

    ^^ favourite lines

    ♥


  • Denerica
    February 2
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    The image of life and love slipping through is wonderful. Nice flow. Blessings.


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    January 25
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    Yeah, thanks for reading.


    • LoveGoneMad
      January 25
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      you are a talented writer... if you keep writing,
      I will keep reading & commenting.

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