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It got dark...

It got dark...

when I wasn't looking.

Or is it because I wasn't looking,
that it got dark?

Is this real or just something you must feel,
to find the reality?

Something tells me...
I am everything and nothing,
simultaneously...

I am one and I am all.

If it got dark its because,
the light just got...
real...
real...

small.



whats going on in your portals girls and boys?

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  • BehindTheShadow
    March 29, 2008
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    Such a thought provoking poem, you did a stellar job with this piece!!


  • PerfectImperfection
    March 24, 2008

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    Wow... A deep and effective piece of thought. It is in those drenched hours, that the pour can often engulf what light could have been. This made me think much of that inability to decipher the pulse of the curtain. I really enjoyed this!!! Awesome write!!!


  • quantumsurveyor
    March 22, 2008
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    This has knocked me out - the final line just made me laugh and laugh - brilliant observation.


  • TabbyCat
    March 14, 2008

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    This reminded me of a song I used to sing in Sunday School that compared our lives to light. When we fail to pay attention...when we aren't careful of our witness...the light fades. I enjoyed this piece. Thank you.


  • crazymomma
    March 13, 2008

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    Great poem

    You have got to be a philosopher. This really makes a person wonder what is really real. I loved the ending


  • just mercedes gold member
    March 13, 2008

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    portal packed with problems, pursuing parentheses.

     

    Again with the philosophical questions, and a great statement - I am everything and nothing, simultaneously.

     

    and the light faded slowly into the dark, and all was one again.

     

    Very good, I like this a lot.


  • Perception
    March 13, 2008

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    Hmmm... Very interesting... I like how you have the repetitive words... You really used that to your advantage... And I like how you set the mood... Wonderful job.. You are such a good writer

    ~ Wonderful


  • XxTwigxX
    March 13, 2008

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    I adore how you write. This is amazing, in its own beautiful ways.I connect with how you say, "Is this real or just something you must feel,
    to find the reality?" That came to me a lot. Thanks for writing this, doll.

    XxTwigxX


  • JackFellDown
    March 13, 2008

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    Interesting

    I can tell you enjoy asking the what if questions. And a person can only assume what they already beleive to hold true. It begs the question if you believe in nothing is anything possible? "I am everything and nothing, Simultaneously" To me that says for the darkness I am everything and for light I am nothing. Its definently an easy read. I liked it. It makes me think so its a great job ~peace

  • Eusebius
    March 13, 2008

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    bravo

    Neat poem, full of Rene DeCartes philosophy...very deftly done throughout... I liked it a whole bunch... bravo... bravo..


  • nitefire
    March 13, 2008

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    This poem really shows the duel nature present in most things. The yin and yang. I think this poem has alot of literary balance. I enjoyed how the poems fades away. Very nicely done!

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