I thought I would tell you I'm here
To be a haven, a stronghold, a friend.
The shadows are fierce and dark,
But I will bring you a light.
If you take my hand, I promise you
That I will not let go.
We will brave this storm together
And in the end we will smile.
Author notes
This poem is for the contest "beautiful life" option 3.
A contest entry
- beautiful life~ by transit.
700 points, ended March 19, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I love all sorts of comments; general ones and advanced critiques as well.
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Its sweet ad beautiful.
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love it
I love this poem! It reminds me of
'we are family' song thing... yeah.
It sounds like your love for someone
that will never be broken...
Good Write!
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Thanks!
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aaww
such a sweet and caring poem. From this short poem, you seem to be a brilliant friend. The contrst between "fierce and dark" and "light" are powerful and it really made me believe I was going to be saved from my misery.
After all the bad times and the storms, friends still can smile and share laughter.
beautiful message and lovely poem filled with hope. best of luck in the contest!
love,
transit
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Thank you!
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Sounds like you'd make a pretty good friend. You've expressed a deep sense of loyalty in a few words. This was very well done. Keep it up.
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Thank you.
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