I played the Wii
Having lots of fun
When the phone rings.
I walked towards it
And spoke into the receiver
Just as when I was in a really good mood
It immediately switched around.
My best friend had slipped off a roof
Slammed her neck on the metal edge
Fell into the tree
And finally fell crushing her head on the ground.
Damn,
How could this happen?
She meant everything to me
I wasn't there to stop her from falling.
My father drove quickly to the hospital
And I rushed in
Frantically asking people where her room was.
I finally approached her
The girl I loved
Had been in serious medical care
And she had been through brain and neck surgery.
I loved her
She knew it
She meant everything to me
Now,
These would be her finally seconds
Of life.
I leaned towards her
And kissed the damaged blossom's fore head.
She smiled weakly
Then hoarsely choked and coughed
I patted her back gently on the back.
I told her that if there was anyone to spend the rest of my life with
It would be her
I mentioned Atheist God
Would take care of her.
She softly whispered in my ear
And said she loved me
She had felt that way for a long time.
Suddenly,
Her face froze
And stood still
Not another move was ever made again.
*bunny*
Pure *bunny*
Lindsay died
In front of me
Why did this happen?
I will always miss her
My best friend.
I went into the parking lot
And took a near by club
I began to smash the windows on the cars
In my shock and anger.
Why...
'SMASH'
Did..
'SMASH'
She...
'SMASH'
Have to
'SMASH'
Die?!?!?!?!?
A guy in a wheel chair with a person supporting him
Saw the broken windows
Then yelled at me.
I didn't give a crap
Hell
I didn't care about anything at this moment.
I ran towards the back of the hospital
And snuck with a nail
Into the back door.
I went into her room
And took her in my arms
I went up to the roof and gently laid her down.
I performed CPR on her
I hoped she would come back
A couple of hours later
She was still a frozen stone.
I weaped into her hair
Sad
She wasn't coming back.
I'm such a bastard for letting this happen to her
Why?!?
Come back!!!!
I LOVE YOU!!!!
DON"T DIE ON MY NOW!!!!!
I took her to a cemetery
I had a shovel and dug a hole
I laid her carefully in there
Then put the dirt back on.
I prayed to Atheist God
That she rest in peace.
Days later
My parents read an article on the front page
Of the newspaper
A teenager had committed suicide
Naked
With rose with thorns through the head
And blood from the chest.
That teenager
Was me.
A contest entry
- Contest! come and join!!!! by I-Feel-weightless.
360 points, ended May 1, 2008, 20 entries
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Option # 3. A sad, fictional poem. About the girl I love.
Comments
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This poems shows that you really love her but it lacked the true emotion someone would feel. I didn't feel sad or angry when I read this poem. Try putting a little more emotion into it.
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Did your friend actually say you could make up a story about her dying? Not to contradict you, but I find this quite intense to be fictional. Normally I find things people write about their friends enjoyable but to read something so sad and to find it's not really true makes me find this poem,in my opinion, disappointing. Sorry.
Brian

