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Thinking

Oh the righteous people who bow to pray.
Oh the humble people who take no credit.
The innocent who sing such praises all day.
If I could be like them, if I could edit.

No angel on high am I or saint who holds true
Because I do not hold love for anyone.
So stay away for I can not stand by you
What I twisted apart can not be undone.

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  • james119
    March 16, 2008

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    sad write

    N here is prisoner of ...
    All fail sometimes, but while others accept forgiveness and forgive thenselves, N chooses not to.
    We can all find ourselves in that place from time to time

    Well expressed


  • Frodofan silver member
    March 13, 2008
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    Don't agree with the last line at all. People come back to things all the time and things most certainly can change.

    I wrote a couple of poems last night inspired by you, so be on the look out for them. I don't have time to type them up right now though. Maybe tonight.

    Technically, this has one of the best rhythms of any of your pieces so far I think.


  • mollycubed
    March 12, 2008
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    Wow. I really really like this.
    "For I can not stand by you."