Cranium Clutter by nitefire at All poetry

Voices
ranging from quiet whispers to bellowing screams
rip out my ears from inside.
Slice nicely from corner to corner
all the contents of my mind.
This IS NOT
a... CONCLUSION ...or...
an... IDEA.
This IS NOT a dimly lit bulb of invention.
This IS NOT a hint of wisdom in a world of ignorance.

This IS...
Crippling,
Chaotic,
Clamor
...seeping in from every opening
and tiny pore of my internal thought process.
This IS a tangled forest of thought with groping branches of twisted logic.
This IS lofty-peaked mountains of unanswered questions.
This IS hated heart that battles reason.

Undeserving pleasure of my pen.
Each stroke releasing
pounds of pressure
lyrics of love
verses of fear and vanity.
Only hoping to catch one complete thought
before it is swept away by a the rushing current
of a million more.
Like the currents of the sea.
Rhythmically broken and never relenting.
Billions of dreams and visions
filling my minds eye to the brim.
Color explodes into some unidentified creature
that chews my brain like trident
with and woeful green grimace
in the frame of a disjointed face.
The creature looks right into the back of my eyes and spits
"Have you had enough yet?

A contest entry

Anything Goes.......But it has to have emotion by BetterThanDrugs. 450 points, ended March 17, 72 entries
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Hit me with EVERYTHING. PW OK! by a dozenglassroses. 375 points, ended March 28, 65 entries
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What is your honest opinion?

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a dozenglassroses
March 27

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Great job;
Billions of dreams and visions
filling my minds eye to the brim.

Loved those verses the best.
BetterThanDrugs
March 15

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This is a good poem
This is a good poem, but it's not the type of thing I was looking for in whole, the second part I really liked although I'm not a fan of the first part
JackFellDown
March 13

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Wow
This is intense, I love the chaos that you linked together. There are so many striking lines here like "Lyrics of love, Verses of Vanity and Fear." That is beautiful. It has little to no rhyme but an excellent flow. When you say "This is not a dimly lit bulb of invention" Its amazing almost like saying Im not the crazy person here and I know exactly what im talking about. I have written a piece very similar to this one and I can say I scratched the surface on the level of Attenthion this piece grabs. Very good job, ~peace
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scsalumni
March 13
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It's a very vivid poem with a lot of honesty and imagery. Very enjoyable.
XxTwigxX
March 13

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I like the imagery that this piece ensues, very interestion, I really like the last few lines.
The whold piece as a matter of fact. This, to me is what poetry should be like. A vast circle around one thing. Very awsome.
Robin Candor
March 12

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Exceptional
No, you have not had enough yet my poetic friend. You are only begining. I cannot like you expose the inner workings of the torment within my mind, soul, heart and spirit. I choose th cloak my fears and exhaustion in other tones and write about others in general. I owe my readership something more than myself, though I do grope in those valleys from time to time. You have a predisposition for this and that is not a bad thing. A penchant to know yourself. Many writers i know say, "That wasn't about me, it was about someone I created." I doubt that very seriously, though I am a caring soul. We write about ourselves exclusively even when we say we don't. This piece is something I wish I would have had a hand in because the voice is real and the words are numbing. RC
Creatress
March 12

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honestly I love it. Its so raw and fresh and in your face. You grab the reader as hard as your mind is being accosted by this creature. I really loved the ending as it completed the picture. I must say, I know what your going through....unfortunately.
rock on poet...
Creatress