I once met a boy whose pride was like no other.
He was always got in fights but yet he always one.
Till one day he fought a little boy with a gun.
I once met a girl whose envy was amazing.
Anything someone had she wanted.
Then one day she "had it all" and still wanted more
I once met a glutton whom nobody surpassed.
He ate not to be full or healthy but because he could.
But one day he ate too much and got stuck in his chair.
I once met a woman who lived for lust.
She slept with every man she could.
And one day she had a baby never knowing the dad's.
I once met a worker who was always angry.
Cursing and yelling he made into his way of life.
He one day made a boy cry, the owner's son.
I once met a man who did all in greed.
He live to get everything that he could,
until he cheated a man who was part of the mob.
I once met a person who lived like a sloth.
They never did anything if it could be helped.
One day was like the last always just as bad.
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I'm Beautiful-Nightmare and id like to hear what you think.
A contest entry
- Seven Deadly Sins - THIRD AND FINAL ROUND by Crazy9Piano8Freak.
900 points, ended March 26, 2008, 4 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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good job! just one thing... read the second and third stanzas and see if you can make them a little better... they were kind of "unfit" for me... or i mean they didn't fit into the flow well... see what you can do and let me know when you changed it... also read through it and do a spell check although some you may need to change yourself so that it makes sense. thanks! it was a great write other than those few things. Thanks for the entry!
Koko
Okay, so i just realized that you didn't enter or win in either of the other two rounds, so i'm not going to DQ you, but you won't win anything either. sorry about that, but those are the rules...
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