Confucious says
Man steal neighbors canteloupe
Melon felon
Confucious says
Rich female high school senior
Upper class lass
Confucious says
Sprinter at end of race
Breathes in short pants
Confucious says
Obese univeralist
Hippy hippy
Confucious says
Farmer in Iowa
Landlubber
Author notes
Written December 2nd, 2003
In a list
A contest entry
- Humor by C.I.M.A Punk.
500 points, ended January 5, 2008, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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It's a nice entry for this contest. I like the obese universalist one.
Good Luck!
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hee hee hee i love this! very funny. but, i have to correct you on a few things. first of all, me being a unitarian universalist, you spell it universalist, not univeralist. also, i hate to be critical here, but a true haiku is 5-7-5. most of these are 4-7-4, or 4-6-4, or 4-6-3. just saying. as i said, hate to be critical.
i try to be good... 
~medusa seduca~
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thanks for giving me an extra smile, it has been a joy to read your msot well crafted Haiku. Nice penning!
ICUlookn
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eh..
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lmao cute and good!
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playful
ah, you're a crack-up (as my daughter says) billbard...enjoyed reading these. they are vivid images and i particularly like the way you play with words during your inspirations.
my favourite by far is this one:
Confucious says
Sprinter at end of race
Breathes in short pants
& on that image, i'll back out of the door...
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Wow you are so funny i loved your new poems...This one stands out though!
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*This* is the reason why I love to read your work! I loved this. You are very funny and extermly talented! Great piece as usual. Keep writing so that I can keep reading~
~*Misty*~
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tee hee. this was cute.
i think you need to change saya to says in the second stanza.
short and to the point.
and funny.
mel -
Ha, ha.. you have made me grin.. much needed today..
Thanks
Barb
xxx
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