I have your memories
placed within a plastic bag
strewn carlessly in the garage.
I thought that's where I would forget you.
As heartbeats cease, enlightenment surfaces
As night turns to day
day turns to night
i will rise and fall
fall and rise
to be near you
Author notes
prompt 1
I guess this came out quite cliche.
critiques welcome...
prompt:
1. "Even if the heart refused to beat, I would still love you
A contest entry
- Quicke 10/20/3 by Blooming Poet.
300 points, ended March 14, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I actually liked the lines about the memories being placed in some corner of the garage, be it carelessly or forgotten. It shows how the heart and mind has a way of pulling memories back even without our help. Good luck in the contest!
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Thank you
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you are right it is a little cliche and childish, but sometimes thats okay.
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