Gray winds blow
And bring with you change
Don't leave me here
Another day
Fly in birds of color
And hint of spring
Melt the ice
Surrounding me
Lift your clouds
Release these chains
Turn too much night
Into more of day
Bring purpose to my hands
And verse to my soul
Make me feel
I am consoled.
Turn forward the clock
And force me awake
To see the stars
Before day breaks
Inspire me to love
So that I may compose
Without a thought
My rhyme and prose.
Author notes
Spring is coming soon!
A contest entry
- *** UNCOVER MY FEELINGS *** by Rebekah-Ann.
500 points, ended April 2, 2008, 37 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is lovely! I don't remeber putting my link to "change" or the "wind"... Yet you grabbed that words from my heart and displayed my feelings in such a lovely way! I am so glad you entered and I want to say thank you very much. You show real talent and I really love the way you danced with your lines! Thank you for your entry! Becks
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the shorter line length moves the poem along quickly, it adds to the urgency of the yearning for spring.
the final stanza sums up the piece very well, the rhymes structure works perfectly.
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that is uplifting as a tip
I more than chuckle with warmth
but am spirited by "Turn too much night
Into more of day
Bring purpose to my hands
And verse to my soul" with thanks moved to hug back or work... which reminds me of the close of Psalm 90 for freshness of feasibility.
there is so much motivation in cheerful landscape and endurance of forecast that can serve should. and useful solitude instead of just sliding in blanket but contemplative moments with what can be dawning "And force me awake
To see the stars
Before day breaks" is so sparkling appreciative for the helpful turn.
there are many encouragements to follow,
babies are my subject
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