A tragic reverie,
Chronology,
Exempt.
The Sahara fuels
The hour glass.
Eternal.
Those sands of time
Bury you again.
As I did before.
Teardrops precipitate
From clouds
Within my thoughts.
Author notes
Used picture prompt
A contest entry
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Comments
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Interesting piece, yet I feel this could be longer. It sounds strong, but I feel it has so much more potential and things that could enhance this. In the previous contest, I see it had its limitations. It's difficult to tame poetry in set standards at times. I do like the hour glass and sands of time references in here. Like I said, strong, but I would love to see more to it.
Thank you for entering "Enter All Your Dark Writes Here (Series - II)". Best of luck to you!
M a r l u x i a
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this is a very nice write. I've enjoyed this. keep up the great job.
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Very nice indeed, enjoyed your choice of words here and how you made the prompt your own. Liked the Sahara bit, never thought it could fit in but then I thought of sands of time. Nicely done.
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ohhhhh,,,,really nice.
Of all I have read thins is the best...
Simon
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