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Stunned into Aching Silence

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How is it,

even from across this vast horizon's haze,

beyond the distant shores

of sunlight's reaching,

you see me

with such crystalline clarity ~

when others,

standing next to me,

are blind?

There are gentle earthquakes forming

beneath my feet,

a powerful trembling

that caresses from within ~

I sway under your moonlit visions,

delicate stars drifting

underneath my fragile flesh ~

erupting into blooms,

their heavenly fragrances

pour from my eyes

as subtle rain sighs.

Though our fingers cannot touch,

our souls have seemingly mingled

& merged,

a kaleidoscope of rhythm's promise,


a forest filled

with windsong

waiting

to be discovered...







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Art: "Windflowers" by John William Waterhouse, 1903





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  • ian sawicki
    March 14

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    ah the souls that merge and twist around in life and love, we dance to the tune of the breeze, a good poem


  • JinSays gold member
    March 13

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    Beautiful.
    There went my heart, right on the floor..
    Stunning work of art, poetess..
    jin


  • arafura
    March 13

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    "Though our fingers cannot touch,
    our souls have seemingly mingled
    & merged..."

    Wonderful...


  • ParadiseBliss
    March 13

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    A Thing Of Beauty

    "Beautiful" indeed! This picture you've painted with words!!

    A thought to remember: A thing of beauty is a joy forever!

    Best,
    Sophie.


  • violetrose
    March 12

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    This is a really beautiful piece! The image you put with it is very pretty, too. I especially like the lines

    "There are gentle earthquakes forming
    beneath my feet"

    Describing earthquakes as "gentle" makes a really poignant image. The only thing I'm unsure about with this piece was your use of ~ ...it sort of threw off the rhythm for me, like the ~ stuck out and made me stop to ponder why they were there. But overall, a wonderful piece. Bravo!

  • mzmikki silver member
    March 12
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    This is very beautiful!!!

  • Dalaney gold member
    March 12
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    lovely, my friend.

    Love, Lane


  • kaibab silver member
    March 12

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    Such is way of kindred truth...I often feel like I was born in a strange place when art is not important and hype is over=rated...lovely scribe


  • XxTwigxX
    March 12
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    Nice Write.

    I like the imagery, it complements your picture very well. This flows like a masterpiece, I think.
    The lines ,
    " I sway under your moonlit visions,

    delicate stars drifting

    underneath my fragile flesh ~"
    really came out at me. And I love the title.

    Very good write poet, keep it up.


  • alyssaxo
    March 12

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    beautiful

    This is a wonderful poem, when I read it I got a picture in my mind. Great job, keep up the awesome work.

    . Rewarded 4

  • awesome

  • what beautiful imagery
    'I sway under your moonlit visions
    delicate stars drifting
    underneath my fragile flesh'

  • Eusebius
    March 12

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    bravo

    Magical, romanitical, and so highly evocative of distant and differnet worlds where communication is actually possible. I loved this one! bravo... bravo... bravo...

  • Triumph of Night Hope

    Though our fingers cannot touch,
    our souls have seemingly mingled
    & merged,
    a kaleidoscope of rhythm's promise,


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