Destiny,Destiny
what will it turn out to be?
whats best for me?
lifes testin me
So unclear
Steady looking but won't appear
no longer feeling the need to explain
gain
complain at conventions
remain,detained in detention
no mental suspension
its over
problem solved
desolved
you are no longer involved
Your assistance is no longer needed
you gave no warning to be heeded
i'm heated
I asked you to
help me through
did you?
no..
Yes bathed and clothed
fed and rose
but what about
the emotion enclosed?
Neglected!
defected
my life is so hectic
but you can't see
too caught up.
in the life that isn't me
I practically..
begged you to question
unravel my suggestion
my mental digestion
suppose to be a helpful part of my life
mother,savior,guide
yet unaware that your daughter has died
within herself
left in court to
defend herself
why?
Why were you ignoring me
detouring me?
charging a mental fee
to simply be
in your presence
too busy to support
review my report
talking to me as a last resort
to keep me holding on
Hoping that I could be strong
but not for long
never long
Because im sick
Sick,Sick
Sickly
farther down than the mind can reach
my souls been breached..
way too tired to begin to beseech
which is why i refuse
to begin to defuse
our issues again
its way too late
no more lies to create
clear the slate..
concentrate
rejecting the fate
you gave to me
i'll conceive my own
recieve the throne
won't please you
decieve you
and all alone..
can't beat that
from fiction to fact
completely intact
I am me
with no help from thee...
A contest entry
- Family Dispute by MasochisticallyJess.
300 points, ended March 25, 2008, 16 entries
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Comments
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nicceee...not just nice...but hit me hard and true...
oh. wow. great.
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i like this very much
and i must tell you that i feel this way alot
i mean a lot...
but this is very lovely
thank you so much
good job and good luck! -
Very nice flow. It almost sounds like hip-hop stylistically. It's very powerful. My favorite line is "yet unaware that your daughter has died". Nice work
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What you have here is a beautiful piece of poetry. The only thing I don't like about it is the last line/title, merely because I have never liked the word "thee," mostly because I don't think it has a place in contemporary poetry. But that's just a personal opinion; I was very happy that I read this.
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I LOVE this poem - I love the clear and defined rythm, the words, all of it - very well done, I was so glad I got to read it
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LOVE IT!!!!!
i am actually ready to cry and laugh and clap all at the same time. my ma' and me have a real "weird" relationship... this is kinda how it is... i loved the poem... keep sharing... great write/great read!
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sWEET POEM
I have no comments to leave you becuase I like this poem so much. But I have to leave a long enough comment to get the double points. Seriosuly , I like this work very much and will try this style. Add me if you dare. I think you would like my milky smoothness just as your literary masterpiece has put a dash of beauty in my day.
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