What if?
These black wings could be seen?
The ones that adorn my back when somebody dies.
What if I stopped believing in them?
Would this mean I've lost all hope in my world...
That reality is there?
I never was?
What if?
I forget your face?
The one who gave me these wings.
Nothing solid to prove you were here on Earth.
Only pixels on the monitor.
What if the technology world crashed...
Will I forget your face?
After all that has happened?
What if?
I just stop breathing?
Take a step from the world and look down.
Will I see there is more light then what I know?
Or will it hit me in the face...
What if I don't want to breath again?
Is that suicide?
What if?
Two words that mean so much.
Two different realities of what could be...
And what is.
Author notes
Yeah.....
A contest entry
- What If? by Patwak919.
600 points, ended March 22, 2008, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What if?
Comments
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Very nice. I like your adaption of the prompt, and you seem to use "What if" just the right amount. I especially like the ending, which ties the whole idea of the poem together very nicely. Very nice job, and good luck in my contest.
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Oh, yay.
I like your contest, the prompt provokes thoughts.
Have fun judging!
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I agree. The last four lines are pretty insightful. Very good.
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Thanks, good luck in the contest!
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Hm...very interesting. I enjoyed reading this, especially the last four lines.
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Yay, but where are you!!!????
I miss you, cause you not here
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