Submerged,
drowning.
This web I have woven holds me under.
Every word,
every moment.
Another thread in this rope;
I can't breath.
Always stronger;
as my breath escapes me.
As I slip under,
I breathe.
A shadow of forgiveness,
is air in my lungs.
You loosen this rope;
one more chance.
I am still alive.
Author notes
OPTIONS:
*Title*
- Still Alive -
"oh what a tangled web we weave.. i don't remember the rest of this saying. something about deceive. "
A contest entry
- Options by Ilma.
600 points, ended March 16, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Tell me what you think.
Comments
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i just watched a film yesterday about the band joy division and ian curtis who hung himself, (called control) sadly he died so not still alive for him, a good poem
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I really liked this, it was simple but effective. My favourite stanza was definitely the last one. I love the idea of a 'shadow of forgiveness'.
Thanks for entering and good luck =]
Hannah x
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