sitting alone in the dark
i i stair alt the wall
with a strange girl staring back
tears rolling down her face
and scars apon her wrist
i dont know who shes is
or why shes crying
she looks so lost
so hert
so sad
i ask her why
why are you crying
why are you so sad
and all she dose is
cry
i cant stand to look at her any more
so i turn on the light
then i realize that
girl who looks so sad and
thats girl with scars
is me!!!
i am the one with scars on my wrist
and the tears rolling down my face
what do u think?
Comments
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You have two I's and you spelt "at" wrong, there is no "l" in the midle dearie. You spelt "hurt" wrong too. lol
I like it is really good. I like how you have if formatted. It really flows. Some of my favorite lines are:
".....Tears rolling down her face
and scars upon her wrist
I don't know who she is
or why she's crying
she looks so lost
so hurt
so sad..."
Those lines are just so discriptive and they just have so much feeling in them that you know exactly what she is feeling. Its so good! You did an awesome write! Good job! you get three clappys!
Keep up the awesome writing girl! And remember Phil 4:13 and always remember that I will always be here for you to talk to me if you ever need it! Also don't forget that I love you
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