What if eternity were found,
was an illusion
to which we're still bound?
©2008
3-11-08
Author notes
Written for the contest: 10PoetsX13WordsX15Minutes
Title is pretty much it
by Friday
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2395485
Prompt:
"And as we laid ourselves to rest
we dreamt of life and woke to death"
- twistedstranger @ AP
A contest entry
- 10PoetsX13WordsX15Minutes by Exodus.
450 points, ended March 13, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
A critical comment is invited
Comments
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this is all there is - this is it. Nothing more to it than this. Interesting way you write this in the poem - liked the brevity of the lines and the shock to which one comes to terms with it.
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Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. I am glad the meaning came through; there were a couple who did not get it.
rous
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Do you mean "appauling" or "appalling"?
I thought this read as being a little confusing but other than that it was good. -
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Since my spellcheck did not point it out, I assumed it was an alternate spelling. I have corrected it. Thank you for commenting and pointing it out. I am not sure why it is confusing, but it helps to have the input.
rous
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According to dictionary.com, appauling isn't a word. So I'm confused.
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According to Merriam-Webster.com it is not a word. My bad. See post above this one for explanation. Thank you for pointing it out.
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then we'd realize that there's only this moment...and it lasts forever
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Exactly. I am glad someone got it. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. (Not to mention the applauds!
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rous
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I like the rhyme in this one.
Great descriptions.
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Thank you. I do appreciate your reading and taking the time to comment.
rous
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