What is this feeling?
That runs deep into my bones?
I can't describe it.
But neither can you.
I feel my pulse quicken
As you reach and take my hand
What is this feeling?
And do you feel it too?
I try to say something
But the words just will not come
What is this feeling?
This feeling... Is it love?
A contest entry
- Love, Love, Love. No PW by LanguishedLad.
700 points, ended March 17, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Poetic Idol (Auditions) by TwilightBloodRuns.
315 points, ended June 8, 2008, 31 entries
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Well penned
Thanks for your entry I liked it alot and best of luck in the contest.
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i definitely think this is something most people have experienced (or will experience) at some point in their life. i know i have. and when you first realize you are in love, it's the most wonderful and scariest feeling (worried if the other person feels the same way about you!).
i like the repetition of the question 'what is this feeling?' in the three stanzas. one suggestion i have is the ending line. i think you can just end with 'Is it love?' instead of repeating 'this feeling' again. i think it would just give the piece a more solid, finished ending.
overall a nice piece that i think describes that moment of naming that feeling of love. keep up the good work and best of luck in the contest <3 -
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Okay. Thanks for the tip. I'll have a look and see how it works out...
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Nice Piece
Well done and good luck in the contest.
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Thanks!
Why thank you! I'm glad you liked it!
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