I can't find the words
To describe how I feel
But something inside
Tells me it's not real
I try to be brave
I try to be strong
But something inside
Tells me I'm wrong
I want to be with you
But you've lost my trust
I can feel you inside
I'm burning with lust
My heart is empty
And yours is cold
There is nothing inside
But the lies you have told
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Comments
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oh my god
This is very good
the rhyme and flow are just absolutely perfect
Your piece was beautiful and unflawed
Favorite Part: I don't have one it is just all over amazing.
Thanks for the entry
Good Luck
♥[Katee]♥ -
This is pretty good, it could be worse. The thing that bugs me is how cliche and overused the rhyme is, no offense.
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Great write, it hurts to feel you've been deceived. Thank you for sharing your favorite with me, best of luck in the contest.
♥
whisper
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Outstanding!
Wow I'm speechless my friend what a powerful, heartfelt piece you have written, you inspire me your talented and creative with your words. They say the best poems come from the heart and you really did that! My favourite part is
" My heart is empty
and yours is cold
there is nothing inside
but the lies you have told"
great verse really hit home with me when my partner and I fight.
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