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Vibrant

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Mercury bubbles burst in glee,
valiant sapphires rain in the sea.
Platinum waves twist and twirl,
tepid designs begin to unfurl.

Hidden within the fossilized sands,
ready to lend a helping hand.
When sheer cyclonic rapids clash,
upon the rocks, mighty ships crash.

Vessels bend easily, before they break,
revealing gems for me to take.
Beneath the surface, yawning deep,
salvaging indigo souls to keep.

Absorbing power within the silt,
as bygone bodies begin to wilt.
With my beauty I tarnish and taint,
contaminating masses without restraint.

Luring reality with self-will,
Devouring till I've had my fill.
Mournful mermaids hide from me,
for I am Vibrant, Queen of the sea.

 

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Prompt; Picture. If you choose a thing, you are brave. What name have you given this creature and what is it's story? What purpose does it have?

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  • Gypsie Ink
    March 18, 2008

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    Captiviting

    I really like the name for the creature and "Mournful mermaids hide from me" that should frighten even the fisherman to hide among the shores. Thank you for your entry and Best of luck in the contest.


  • Freestyle Bushido
    March 15, 2008

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    I like the imagery in this write, its very vivid and rich to the minds eye. The flow and rhyme was smooth and flawless, I really like these lines here
    "Absorbing power within the silt,
    as bygone bodies begin to wilt."

    excellent work!


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    March 13, 2008

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    BRAVO! BRAVO!

    What a feast of a poem to enjoy!
    Thankyou dear poet for refreshing us with the beauty and
    depth of the SEA!
    well done! very well done!
    ears2hearyou
    Kathleen/SEattle. : )))))))))))))


  • JinSays gold member
    March 13, 2008

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    WONDERFUL!!!!
    I just loved everything about this write, lady!!!
    there are so many little fishes of inspiration swimming around it!!!
    How awesome that I picked this write to click on!!!
    Jin


  • Angel of disaster
    March 13, 2008

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    Wow, this a an awsome poem, i loved it...I love things about the sea nad i loved the way you worte it, i love the images that can be formed when reading it, i really and truely loved this poem the best out of all the poems that i ahev read today!!! Keep up your awsome work!!!!

    Becca


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    March 13, 2008
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    Brilliant!! This is fricking awesome. Great talent displayed here. Good luck in the contest.

  • scum of the earth
    March 13, 2008

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    WOW amazing job!!!! I love this part

    "Absorbing power within the silt, as bygone bodies begin to wilt."

    That is my favorite part, i just love love love this poem!


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    March 12, 2008

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    FAN-FREAKIN-TASTIC!!!!!

    Wow.. you blow me away hun.. you have created another masterpiece here. Such amazing imagery and you have completely embraced the picture and brought it to life!!

    As always your flow and rhyme as seemless!

    Great job!!

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