falling faster through
that cold middle air
to shatter eventually against the ground
of the expanse beneath,
dead and densely packed,
that swallows every tormented whimper
and rumor of a sound.
echo of infernal glow
on the hollow walls
of this cavernous cell
fires of Hell, could it be?
come to save me at last,
behind this sharp-edged mask
cruel as you are,
bring sweet change
from this sickening freefall
and consume me in your blistering heat
unforgiving and welcome at last.
A contest entry
- 2000 Points For Gold...Dark, Evil, Demonic, Whatever by Fenrir Rising.
2070 points, ended March 14, 2008, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Poems About Hell by Michael H..
500 points, ended August 14, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
God help me.
Comments
1 - 7 of 7
-
It's almost like you've been to Hell to describe it like so. Gold worthy indeed.
-
-
Perhaps I have. Perhaps not.
Thank you for all of your comments.
-
-
"come to save me at last,
behind this sharp-edged mask
cruel as you are,"
that was my fav part, all together great write, a bit dark, but still great, enjoyed it
congrats on the gold
-
Wow, absolutley perfect from start to finish, very griping and emotionally charged. Bravo.
The title was a little off too me, it didn't seem to go along with the rest, but when I read the poem itself i was left on my ass thinking "Wow, bra-fucking-vo"
Great job
-
-
Well, the title stems from the lines
"fires of Hell, could it be?
come to save me at last,
behind this sharp-edged mask
cruel as you are,
bring sweet change"
I hope that clears it up. Thank you for the comment and trophy.
-
-
"come to save me at last,
behind this sharp-edged mask
cruel as you are,
bring sweet change..."
Dark and brooding work my friend... but vivid in it's damning imagery. Well done! Good luck in the contest!
-
Oh the agony....
I'm not sure of this one, either...
Adding your comment:
1 - 7 of 7
