It wouldn't be so bad,
a little cold perhaps
but it's better then another relapse
so jump in and be glad
There is far more honor in it
then in failing again
or so say all the other men
and they all know you were born to quit
So why deny them a show
and a party at your wake
after-all whats one more mistake
so dive into the ocean like you longed to years ago
Sometimes it's ok to give up
A contest entry
- Pic Prompt 3 by nothinghere.
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I have a slightly different viewpoint than that of your poem, but I like how you put it. It's worth consideration.
Good luck in the contest!
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Wow.. such a feeling of hopelessness in this... so very sad! But a great take on the prompt!
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Returning Thr Favor
Very nicley written and the rhyme is great too - the story content is your own - I don't think we were born to quit though - keep on keeping on - Bless God - Joe - (Dobar Dan) Have a great day ehhh
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Wow. The second stanza really holds the emotions tightly.
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Best of luck in the contest
Stay safe
~Manda
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this is really good! very deep and i really don't know what. you're pensive.
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A poignant depiction, but the strong do survive to reflect, and, the question is; will you get back up when you fall?
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