what I (now) did have
is (locked) lost in a sea
of (love) despair.
&& what I de.sire
(Is) can.not.be mine
ne-ver have.I needed
You as.much as now
&I weep for my love (found) lost
she.is (everything) lost to me
forevermore
Author notes
I don't know how to add italics, and probably cannot due to my membership, so please read words in parentheses as being italicized. Thank you.
P.S. this is the first time I have attempted dp with any actual effort, so forgive me if it doesn't feel "right" for the style I chose.
P.P.S. This is for you, Adrie, a poem without a rhyme scheme. If you percieve one, it is because you are familiar with my work and expect it.
P.P.P.S. btw, Adrie, this is you fault if it sucks for all those dp you have written. You caught my attention with them and made me want to try. Not my fault if I am an *coughs "inexperienced"* poet.
A contest entry
- inspiration en masse. by unraveled.
800 points, ended March 18, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I love this new style you are creating here.
Very creative, and doesnt distract.
Delila
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wow very nice..never read or wrote anything like this before
Eventhough i have read this a few days ago looking at this again still amazes me..wow you have a way in amazing people don't cha? don't worry about not knowing how to use italics...this poem is brilliant like that =)
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ah, it's find, and i feel special. i got two notes! no, you cannot add italics because of your membership, the only way is if your did...a dp with me...which you should. and they only way you're going to do d.p. "successfully" is if you try. heh
besides, i try the subtle approach with d.p. which many people don't notice, and the ones that do, copy me...o_-
i got two notes!
neway: this is a good attempt at it, maybe if you ______ space the parenthesis, it would look a bit better. other than that, it was good.
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