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the key strokes can hear him slowly dying

 

He is trapped
Trapped by himself and the point-click
Draw by the 5'5" with blue eyes
Doing things that mama ain't proud of
Media samples of so-called humanity
Making money off of sin and emotion
His dirty little secret
Does it make him feel like a man?
Watching her
Help you out, that way
No sir. I don't think I can stand here
And let you die this death
In front of your LCD, like it's okay
Take your hand off of the stumbling block, my friend
No more point-click for now
On this tiny little street you would've never thought so
But his mind was in the gutter
Bathing in lust- like it was a sweet fragrance
Not seeing the poisonous fruit that really lies there

It's laughing at you
To your face
The key strokes hear you slowly dying
And nothing can be better for you
Than to say "no more"

 

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  • That was pretty good. It was emotionally exspressive. Good luck on the contest.

  • patrick20traveler
    November 23, 2008

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    Good write.

    And I'm on message if there is money involved; the rest of it reminded me of the priest warning me (sixty years ago) about warts on the palm of my hand.


  • lovesky
    November 23, 2008

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    Great write. I agree with Kimmini it does kinda creep into your mind after you have finished reading.


  • Kimmini
    November 23, 2008
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    Beautifully dark. I love how you crept into my mind and made the words form a picture of emotion.


  • movedon
    July 29, 2008

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    oh wow...the title is...wow. the poem is even more so wow. AMAZING CHRIS!

    warmest,
    Mylee


  • warrior-eagle
    May 12, 2008

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    This song reminded me of Killing Me Softly.
    But, this like your other work
    just leaves me thinking, leaves me wanting more
    and that's good.

    ..Simply Me♥

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