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i'm the shame around the corner that you know all too well

 

Don't act like you don't know what's coming next,
like you're surprised at the outcome,
that you weren't expecting these results.
You treated me like your this and that
I'll treat you like my no not ever.
You run through the streets,
marketing my name with yellow journalism,
like my life is a circus, a telemarketer's gimmick.
You might as well smile and put on your happy face,
what else are you gonna do?
You tell me I was your margin of error,
even though all the errors point back at you.

Yes dear, I'm aware,
that you wish I was gone.
However, I'm that shame around the corner
and you'll soon come chasing after.
I'm the Rubik's cube unsolvable,
I make up my arrogance with nice words
"Hey baby, how do you do?"
It's nice to see that you've stopped running,
I can tell you are out of breath,
relax and have a water break.
Are you thirsty yet?

I'm the shame around the corner,
you know me all too well.
I can be your best friend
or I can be that friend from hell.
It's your story that's unfolding
and only time will tell.
Still Cinderella, we know the truth.
About how you were the whore of your high school
and how your beauty got you places.
But remember dear fairytale, looks can kill,
and you're wearing a Colt revolver.
You're taking chances with all these second glances,
but I'm nobody's fool.
I think you should win the grand prize.
After all, this is about you.

I'm your shame around every corner,
and it seems like you're life is hell

 

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1. Just your most creative, clever, WITTY piece
Btw, playing on words and clever references used well will get major brownie points from me, therefore bettering your chance at a win

'zombiefiedmonkeycheese'

There wasn't a particular reason that I wrote this. I just sat down and knew that I wanted to write something with imagery and analogies in it, and this is what came about.

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Comments

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  • I'm not quite sure what to think of this one. I'll just settle for being speechless.

    • haha that works
      this was one of my first pieces where I tried to really use imagery and metaphors and use them well


  • Exit-Stage-Right
    August 17, 2008

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    Definitely abstract, defintely over 200 words, definitely intelligent in its construction.

    Somewhere or another there's a place for this in the winner's circle.


  • crivanea silver member
    August 5, 2008

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    lol..sounds like high school all right..or maybe even college..or maybe just life in general..a intersting point of view..well penned...a good poem overall..deep and full of emotion...good luck in the contest


  • movedon
    July 29, 2008
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    saddening write. angst. tear jerking. but well penned

    warmest
    mylee


  • thearmsofsorrow
    July 24, 2008

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    I think this one was extremley clever
    and had a pretty decent flow
    I love the cinderella analogy
    you used some amazing lines in there
    but i think omse of the lines ended up a bit cliche
    hmm
    interesting tho, i must say
    I DIDNT GET BORED AT ALL
    which is amazing
    coz normaly, anything more that 8 or so lines, i get bored
    this, kept my interest
    *brownie points*
    XD
    cheers and thanks for the entry


  • SomethingPoetic
    July 7, 2008
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    it was good. angst but good


  • Florida Sunshine
    May 31, 2008

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    This is quite different... completely... It has a 'sink-in' type of feel. We all have some kind of 'shame' so anyone should be able to relate to the poem. Most I think try to hide from their shame, and a few display it on the news.

    But, then I ask myself are they really displaying thier shame or are they only pretending? I love the rubix's cube reference. I must admit when I first 'tried' the rubix cube at the age of like 10 or 11 I too became frustrated to the point of not completing it. My brother showed me how to fix it, so I blame all my evil'ness on them!

    Thanks for entering the Round contest ~ good luck to you!


  • warrior-eagle
    May 12, 2008

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    Wow.
    you got this one,
    your writing has changed a lot though
    really,
    made a lot of improvement.
    But this--second glances,
    eh it got me.
    And the fairy tales,yup,
    you did it.

    ...Simply Me♥


  • darlintlc silver member
    April 23, 2008

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    Wow! You go get her!!
    Loved it!!

    "But remember dear fairytale,looks can kill
    And you're wearing a Colt revolver"

    Very powerful!!

  • sin
    April 23, 2008
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    Freakin great!!!

    Loved it Hon, I'm new, my name is Sin so check me out!!! Tell me what chu think, Tay??


  • Lotus-Mama
    April 23, 2008

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    This is good! Really makes you think, it can be taken in many directions- I enjoyed your sharp wit. Nice one!!!


  • Nicada silver member
    April 23, 2008
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    A very powerful expression of anger towards someone. Nice job....Patty


  • ferg silver member
    April 23, 2008

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    This feels like a rant, and a solid one at that. Love the line "I'm your shame around every corner", it has a great hook to it. Good job!


  • PoetsHeart
    April 23, 2008

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    Wow..............the first time through I kept chasing to an obvious answer, the second time - it could be so many different things and I think the not knowing is the perfect part


    Good luck


  • blondieheartsrakeboy
    March 12, 2008

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    I really like your writing style and how youve come to describe the agony of being called a "mistake." haha..but my favorite part was "I can be your best friend, I can be your best friend from hell" so applicable to people who have been scorned. Nice write!

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