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Saturn's Rings

Through the deep midnight void
The dazzling stars twinkle
Beacons to shadowy worlds
In the twilight galaxies beyond

I find myself drifting
Alone yet surrounded
By hues Crayola never counted
Zooming behind a comet’s iridescent tail

And in the naked splendor of the cosmos
I found Saturn’s boundless rings
Seeming to gaze at me
As I gaped at their utter vastness

So if you look for me
In my tranquil valley above the sky
You’ll find me twirling in Saturn’s luxury
And you can reach it all if you try

Author notes

I am 13 years old.
I wrote this poem because I have always been fascinated with outer space and particularly Saturn's rings. I would probably live there if I could, though it sounds odd. I'd always have a great view.

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  • Desire gold member
    March 20, 2008

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    Thank You!!

    Thank You for Your entry: Saturn's Rings
    Oh My what a Journey you took us on and we were wanting more and more
    This is the second time I traveled from Earth
    Wow!!
    Feels like you had a Blast and Oh I imagine lots of people wanting to take this kind of trip~~
    The Universe harbors so many Wonderful secrets and Thank You for sharing them with us
    It is even better to hear You have always been fascinated with Space~~us too...

    These lines tickled us with smiles~
    I find myself drifting
    Alone yet surrounded
    By hues Crayola never counted
    Zooming behind a comet’s iridescent tail

    Fantastic piece You have created~
    We are Impressed for You are 13 Years old
    and made a Wonderful Tour Guide

    Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit!
    Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet One
    **Judging will be done shortly...
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire&Cheetahliou~*~


  • jbbrandi
    March 18, 2008

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    I liked this! I also loves Saturn's rings, and I think you've described everything beautifully. Awesome job!


    • Felissa
      April 3, 2008
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      Thanks! I really appreciate that.
      By the way, congrats for the gold. You deserved it!