It billows against the gentle drapes,
Ripples like the oceans waves, mired
By these beads of string, which bind
It here and now.
As the silent rays of light embrace
Its thin demure and quiet grace, I watch
beyond the cerulean sky, those waning
crests of a saline sea;
They blossom steady, serene as nigh,
Twirled forth as a dancer by, gone
But not forgotten, and slowly lap
that supple swell
Of earth and russet crag. She returns
The stray clasped by wind, to the bosom
Of her sheet again, and sighs
the day away.
Author notes
Just hoping to capture an image...
Enjoy
A contest entry
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Beautiful Imagery and Rhythm
You are very successful in terms of capturing this image, as well as creating a gentle, lulling rhythm that invokes the feeiing of the cresting and subsiding sea. I like the way you use rhyme, never letting it overshadow other poetic elements or allowing it to become "sing-songey". The unrhymed last lines are very effective. Well done!
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arty.
you might just be my current favorite.
i love to read your works aloud, in a whisper. your poems always slide off my tongue.
i would love to go to Sicily some day. :]
anyways, beautiful, stunning write.
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Thank youu for entering my contest. I really like the way you leave this poem open to the interpretation of the reader. it is almost like you have written about a mystery woman.
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Oooooh..I just loved this one.
I have been to Sicily, and I do love, almost more than anything, to read sea poetry. This piece is beautifully written. Bravo!!
Knight70
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Really amazing!!! its flows so well, its a great piece and you should be verry happy. give your self a huge cookie!
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bravo
Quite a lovely and flowing piece of poetry which I enjoyed greatly... bravo... bravo... bravo... -
Is the lady the tide,the light or something else?
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yup you managed to capture an image... it was a nice write with a good flow keep up the good work!
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Left one with a serene feeling indeed. The image was caught. I wish you the best in the contest you have this pretty piece entered into.
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wow, what beautiful imagery, it painted such an awsome pictue. i wish i was there.
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This is simply beautiful and I am taken aback with each word you penned. It brings a wispy kind of feeling to the reader. It took me to the shore with you. Very very well penned! You should feature this... in fact I shall feature this!!!!
Peace and Love
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*spazz of glee* Amazing. Beautifully written. You score big points with me; I'm Sicilian. Kudos and good luck. -Judge#2
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Beautiful
wonderful immagry! it was very nice to read. btw I'm an italian student and jess (judge 2) is half sisilian lol so nice idea. good job
good luck
thanks 4 entering
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