the unsymmetrical situations
of our paper paradoxes
slowly snap.
[the brittle bones
of reality break.]
Please tell me what you think
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Intense!
I looove this so much!
I miss talking to you!
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Contradictions are powerful and can overtake something that seems to be so good...bringing truth to the forefront. I liked the fragility and sensitivity of this. Well done.
Bella
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Marvelous write. The alliteration is absolutely superb…definitely enhances the tune, really rings in the mind. Very thought provoking, too, I found. It is an interesting portrayal of the imaginative realm. Excellent use of language and the metaphorical power is excellent. Oh, how I adore the world this poem depicts! It is like how some say dreariness makes them happy or how hatred suddenly becomes love- that teetering microcosm within us all, that inner, aesthetic being that leaps from the heart and discards logic and reason…Sorry for rambling, I find this poem has stirred up a great deal of thought in me! Very well done!!!!
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bravo
Very neat and nifty haiku...liked it a whole big bunch.... fine illiteration as well... bravo... bravo.. bravo...
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*steals you and opens you up and takes out all your talent and runs away devilishly*
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wow this is just beautiful.. I love your use of metaphors in this poem. great take on the prompt.
good luck
kat
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Its beautiful
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Mmmmm... great use of metaphor in this to get the picture across.
i wish you great luck in this contest
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