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You and I


I smile softly,

          You smile loudly.

I speak politely,

          You speak too much

I ponder endlessly,

          You’ve forgotten how.

I cry softly,

           You don’t cry at all

I die slowly,

           You live forever.

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Again, an old piece.
Do tell me what you think, I might not reply imediately, but I will ASAP, I promise.
^_^
thank you

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  • Kikai Ni
    April 14, 2008

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    Wow, what a sad piece. I couldn't tell you why, but I felt like you weren't speaking to a lover so much as a friend, or maybe not even a friend, just someone you've seen, maybe even read about. Ah, I'm ranting. Good write.


    • water-spirit-ryuu
      April 15, 2008

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      ^_^ ranting or otherwise thanks. I think you're right, I don't think that it was for a lover. I don't know who it was, friend acquaintance or otherwise, but I do agree with you there. ^_^