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Together We Can...

I've been contemplating,
and waiting, even debating
and finally I've come down to this;
Wish I had the answers
to the questions that we pose,
but I suppose I'd have to sleep on it
for a night or two
to see what I can do.
What I can fathom that will fix
the problems that face us.
I trust we can work together
to make things better.

Two heads are better than one.
Together we will get the job done.
We’ll come up with answers to those
questions that were proposed.
Then, we’ll carry out our promises
as we’re supposed to do.
Walk miles in someone else’s shoes
so we’ll realize the things that they
go through.

Instead of singing the blues
to ears that won't hear,
and tears filled with fears
from pain and anguish
that tends to dish out dumbfoundedness
in the pretense of bliss...
I simply wish that real wasn't surreal.

Harsh realities of life filled with
tragedy and strife...
How can we point the finger?
How can we criticize?
We’ve come together to
let our lights shine
so others may feel our warmth,
and understand that everything is going to
be fine!

In the midst of despair there are those that care,
and share their illumination with dedication.
Yes we can, and we will fit the bill
because we have in the past,
and we continue to pursue our just do.
We will keep moving onward with the stride
of a people with much pride.

Lets do all we can to put a smile
on someone’s face,
and help each other on this
journey to a better place.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

This young man is a spoken word artist to the core. It was my pleasure to write with him. What a breeze it was indeed.

This is the third in a series of recent collaborations with my poetic peers. Thanks moluv10, you are a wonder.

More to come!



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  • Hello Poetryality.

    A strong piece, and it’s message is of course a valid one. Although a collab it is not picked up that this is written by two people; I think you both complemented each other really well, no discernable change in style between stanza’s. Well done to you both.

    My regards.

  • Renee,

    I didnt realize that you had collaborated with another poet until I read your authors comments. If you would have asked me, I would have thought that these words were written by one poet. BRAVO. I think this is a good message that you share, its one, I wish people could really understand. The wealth of knowledge in this world is really under utilized.

    Bravo PoetS! =)

    xoxo, Criss

  • LuzAradia gold member
    March 13

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    Powerful. This would be great if read aloud! The rhyme scheme seemed a bit forced at times but other than that, I love it.


  • JustBreathe gold member
    March 12
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    "Yes we can, and we will fit the bill
    because we have in the past,
    and we continue to pursue our just do.
    We will keep moving onward with the stride
    of a people with much pride."

    Great collaboration ... two speaking as one! And what an uplifting message in this season of hope!


  • secberm
    March 12

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    Well done you two. The melding of minds. Flowed as one. Love the uplifting message. Write on. One.

    Dez


  • raggyann
    March 11
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    this is fantastic my sister
    this was a great mix
    of miinds
    well; done


  • Swangrnv
    March 11

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    True dat!

    Excellent both poets on a seemless pairing of like-mindedness! Deeply moving and involving. Great read!


  • moluv10
    March 11
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    I love how this came together! Thank you for inviting me to do this with you. You're great!


  • Grimoire
    March 11

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    The transition between stanzas is seamless, as if it were written by one mind. A very positive and uplifting message. The poem itself suffers not at all in rhyme, as the spoken word is sensed within it. It does suffer a little bit in poetic device, and sort of has a predictable feel to the words themselves... but as a collab it is wonderful, and would work very well as a spoken word piece.

    peace,
    Grimoire (formerly homewrecker)

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