as i sit there next to the window sills
silently watching people's lives blow away
i have an aching feeling in my heart
then the tears fell off my cheek
the salty, dry tears of my cheeks
i am sad because i am alone
alone in the forsaken house
where my dignity was taken away
and my hope vanished from the face of the earth
other people started to cry
i envy other people because they don't know what they have until it's taken away
i long to make friends but scared of getting hurt
i want to have a boyfriend but wonder if i'm not the only one of the dime a dozen girls he says crappy things to
slowly but surely
outside my house was a bucket of tears on my window
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Comments
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This really speaks to me, but you should probably square up your writing a little bit. I felt the emotion, though. Kudos and good luck. -Judge#2
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Not bad. Very loosly written, but in fairly good taste, I write like this sometimes.. I understand your message well. and it tells a lovely story. Good job!
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very strong and powerful write, it reads slow inhancing the feeling here. Great write. sorrowfull.
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