Vaulting ambition
Which o'erleaps itself, and falls
On the other side
Author notes
Macbeth I (vii) l 28-29
'Side' is present in some versions of the text. I included it for the 5 7 5 syllable count. I'd prefer to leave it out, but I'm not a Haiku expert. Obviously Bill Shakespeare wasn't either.
A contest entry
- "Found" Haiku from Shakespeare #61 by Lyndon.
3090 points, ended April 2, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Leave out
"side". You must not feel the need to be a slave to the 5:7:5 pattern. Stay under 17 syllables, though. -
Soliloquy by Macbeth
Apart from the personification of an abstraction, this is a good piece of poetic form.
You use the old Anglo methodology of 5-7-5 which is okay with me.
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Hmm I like without better too... but I don't like this take on ambition! It's frustrating... especially considering that I was looking for something hopeful with respect to "ambition"... ah well... I guess mine just fell flat on the other right now...
Thanx 4 sharing
P.S. GL with the contest & do keep leaping despite
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Hi Keith, Its funny isnt it how no one misses you when you are gone. Not that I care. Do we give a fuck? No we do not. lol xx
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Interesting Haiku you have here. I've never had good luck with writing a haiku... I'm terrible at it. Good job on this one though.
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