There are some good feelings
Going on through your mind
You cannot really feel them but
The Imaginations are apart of your life
You have to force your self to make it feel real
Just believe and you will see
Watching through this window of another world
But you can't really feel anything.
How real every thing through the windows can be
Close your eyes and just imagine
You can feel through the soothing breeze
To explore a world you have never in your life seen before
You will have good feelings if you just believe
To explore a world you will always see.
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This does not rhyme, Boo Hiss.
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your sometimes nice
stop talkin bout cat food i hate animals -
your sometimes nice
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A beautiful and uplifting poem... I enjoyed reading this one very much, it made me smile.
I especially like the last two lines.
Thanks for sharing!
Keep writing!
Annie
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Thank you for entering my contest. You did not read the rules. sorry, but your poem will be deleted.
Lovely poem and im sad that I have to do this. But I'm a fair judge, and rules are rules.
My favorite line is: You can feel through the soothing breezes
To explore a world you have never in your life seen before
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this poem gave me "good feelings"; however, you did repeat words so that may cost you...great poem otherwise though
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Amazing poem good luck in the contest
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WOW
This was a truly beautiful write!! Thank you for entering & best of luck
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You misspelled 'believe' four times. The rules say to have a solid background. I'm not removing you because you broke a rule though, I'm removing you because this poem is cliche and repetitive. You used the same words over and over--remember, believe, window(s), etc. And 'you' only has one "o." Spell check next time.
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so
don't care
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awesome
great whoopie!
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Judging:
- Title: It fits perfectly.
- Is it what I am looking for? Yes.
- Emotions: Full of careing love.
- Wowness: Good
- Final word: This poem is fantasticly written, and so cute! well done! -
shaken thoughts
there is a good start of explicit example
immediately one can contrast between cabin and weather but for encouragement, which a slide of windows could powerfully buffer sudden steps of wind...
and calmed attention might then "Close your eyes and just imagine
You can feel through the soothing breezes" with enabled patience of other means maybe. but choppiness is upsetting as monotony of waiting songs. but there is verifiable "Good good feelings
But still yoou aren't feeling" caution to enrich with certainty or expansion to a point.
fluttering felt,
babies are my subject -
This is a nice poem. I liked it. Keep up the good job. Sorry I'm not saying more but I really am all commented out... I've been commenting all day lol
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I really liked the first stanza, but after that, the following two just seemed repetative. Nothing new was added to the poem with the following stanzas, other than length. Thanks so much for your entry and good luck!
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