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adieu

if it pleases you so
to share the night
and stroll with the moon

the silent starry night
with glittering nymphs
in a fragerant garden

i long to share such darkness with thee

doth the night i bekon
to kiss thine lips
with moonbeams and roses

like a quiet love longing
for a whispering touch

just beyond the break of day

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  • sicx
    March 14, 2008
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    wow

    I didn't know you wrote so well.


  • KatHardKore
    March 12, 2008

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    Great Write

    I like the imagery this poem sent to my mind. Overall, great write. I think just a few editing problems but overall swell.


  • Tarja
    March 11, 2008

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    Not bad at all m'love. This had a very strong and personal message I can tell... and it was so well written. Nicely done indeed!