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You come again this day,
But why to me?
Mere crumpet on your tray,
I’m naught to thee.
Grey ghostly shadow brew,
I shall not go with you.
For nothing to atone,
Shall not sojourn unknown,
For this I can’t condone.
Can you not see?
I will not go away,
Nor will I flee.
I’ve reasons I must stay,
Can’t you agree?
Not done yet on this plane,
To write in this domain.
I must remain here free,
Scribe under my marquee,
Much deeper than the sea.
My golden key.
Depart from here post haste,
Let clocks run down.
I have no time to waste,
Friends wait in town.
There will partake of wine,
At friendly corner shrine.
Dark Angel in rag gown,
I will not go now down,
I see you as death's clown
Of some renown.
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Death Go Away, I Write Today…
Wandika 3-11-2008
Author notes
Dreams of Writing
Done in the style used by Thomas Lovell Beddoes' poem Dream-Pedlay
Picture: i99.photobucket.com/albums/l303/DBH_pwn/quill.jpg
Very interesting write
From guest Jim Hasler (contact)
I loved the form of which I was unfamiliar but the words, thoughts and emotions all resonated within me as I read this poem from the past. Jim
A contest entry
- Dreams for Sale by Old Poetry.
700 points, ended March 26, 7 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Cool idea- to address death.
Thank you for your entry,
Best of luck!
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Thank you
I appreciate your reading the poem.
Jim -
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No problem
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A lot of emotions in the battle with those unwanted guest in life, from the title to the last line. Very, very nice poem. I like its rhyme pattern too. The second, middle stanza is so deep, so strong as well as emotion and perfect poetical and lyrical expression.
~Sonja~
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Is the dream you have of your own demise?
I find your take on Beddoes' poem interesting and you have taken a different direction than i first thought.
I feel you yourself have a 'dream for sale' as you are not ready to use it yet.
Beautifully written,
Von
Oldpoetry
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I like.
I see that you are already in a contest and this one would have been perfect for mine. But I will get another chance for you to enter. I do think this is very similiar to Do Not Go Gentle. Then again I always like your writes.
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Very emotional and to me one of your best works. Brilliant work again!Good style of rhymes!
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I enjoyed reading this poem and could feel some of the emotions. The desire to be rid of the dream/death, the insistence of remaining on this plane and not being forced to move on. As a stand alone poem it has much to commend it.
Alas the contest was, in my mind, aimed at a dream you would choose to have or to buy. I got the feeling that you were fighting a dream you did not want rather than embracing a dream you did.
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