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Silenced Her Song

He's back in town; so she was told

So goes this tale, though somewhat old.

A love not quenched, still rages on

Now lingers hope of love long gone.

The power felt within his grasp

A smothering as lungs do gasp

For just a breath to stay alive

In hopes to live; barely survive.

Stagnant and stale; her life so lived

For twenty years, each day re-lived

In hopes to find what went so wrong

The day he walked; silenced her song.

He holds her heart and always has;

In fist like jail; like alcatraz.

Closed numbing tight; bars hold her in

And she once more knows she can't win.

  

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  • Samplette gold member
    August 22

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    Oh wow! This is haunting. Amazingly written, and excellently crafted. Wow...awesome piece of poetry!!
    Sam

  • Bob Fox
    May 25

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    loves extreme

    To me this speaks of loves extreme . a totally one sided affair which speaks for itself. sadly pretty darn common with many of todays women. gutsy write


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    May 4

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    Great rhythm to this piece. Very strong, scary images. Stanza 4 very strong image, I question the word "they in L3 of stanza 4, perhaps replace "they" with "bars", since you refer to jail in L2.

    This poem makes me feel scared and sad for the writer.

    • Molassis
      May 4
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      Hey and thanks for the thoughtful comment... I looked at your suggestion and I like it.. going to change it now... Thanks!

      ~melissa

  • Sgt B
    April 19

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    This picture is kinda scary

    But you matched a story line very well. The picture to reflects a slow death almost like starvation. Your poem reflects that as well.
    Great job.
    Very thought provoking.

    ~Ron~

    • Molassis
      April 20
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      Thanks Ron, this picture actually reflects me... the way I am on the inside now...

      Thanks for your comments!

  • Theater Of Dreams
    April 6

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    Damn...

    This kicked the holy hell outta me. OOPS...sorry for that...but it is painful and heart-shredding.

    I miss you.


  • Frogzter gold member
    March 31

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    Good to see you posting and your feelings very much intact! It's been far too long since I have read your exquisite work! You haven't lost the ability to amaze us through your powerful pen! Wishing you all the best,

    Frogz~


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    March 28

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    Melissa, even after so long. It is with grace that you share your words as always.

    Although a touch sad, your words always create a masterpiece of thought, and bring me to see further the real you.

    As always, even after so many days past, will always be here for you.

    Mike
    stay safe


  • Robin Candor
    March 13

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    Chilling

    You caught me off guard, I wasn't expecting what I received. Do I have an option to run, or opt out I guess I do. But I would never do that. No, I will stay on and read a while. I didn't need the photo to catch a glimpse. I'm not knocking it and many here use phots for pieces and contests. Not my cup of tea. The words alone shake me the most. Why do we have to write about the pain of those who left us out? Or about those who sense the 'being left out'? Oh, I know, because if we didn't the world would indeed be daisies and blue skies. That would be some other galaxy. But I am restricted to this one, and the pain is real and the ostracism is real. Leave me out and let me go, the hurt is real, I know, I know, I know. But life just doesn't let things pass. They always seem to come around again involving the same old criminals. That doesn't make the pain any easier. You stirred me up. I guess that means it worked. Your words were biting and I wouldn't want to be the target at the end of this dart. RC


  • kirbysman Moderators member
    March 11

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    Well ma'am, good to see you writing, and writing very well as always. Even if the subject is a bit sad and scary. As usual, it's a near flawless write with wonderful movement and great rhymes. Excellent job there daughter. I need to give you a phone call and catch up on things.

    and love,
    Poppa


  • apoeticinjustice gold member
    March 11

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    a very powerful write, leaves me feeling tortured emotionally. Excellent writing Melissa, heartfelt and honest.
    Good to see you back on AP, don't stay away for so long! lol

    Rory

  • Just4u
    March 11

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    The only power that we hold
    we either use or give away
    The only voice of which we have
    comes by actions or what we say

    The only steps of which we take
    are by our choices made
    The only consequence that comes
    are the reactions to be paid

    There's but one love for everyone
    that can never be bought or sold
    But when we freely give away
    if it's returned, that's just pure gold



    I'm sure many will relate to this one.
    Hopefully not in a negative way, but realizing
    that in the end we are the makers of our
    own cells through the REactions of the actions
    that come to us.

    Have a lovely week...

    Hugs...Eddy


    • Molassis
      March 11
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      Thank you Eddy for taking the time to post such a nice comment... you should post that poem.. it's a wonderful piece!

      ~Melissa
  • Molassis
    March 11
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    ...

  • ShelleyA gold member
    March 11

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    A beautiful write and presentation. Good flow, rhyme and tone. Nice simile. A sad lament with deep expression of emotion. Very nice rhythm. Good word choice, alliteration and assonance. It's so good to see you and read your poetry sis. Well penned.

    • Molassis
      March 11
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      Thank Shelley for reading and commenting.

      Tim's dad just moved back into town... I haven't seen him and I am not sure that I need to see him... I want to move far away so badly.

      Thanks for the phone call... it's always uplifting talking to you. I posted an update on place of prayer...

      Love you Shelley.

      ~Melissa
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