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Rides on navy skies,
delicate wind croons softly
mellow lullabies.
Clouds without anchors hover;
various hues of blue scatter.
Poseidon's kingdom-
its deep abyss hums along.
Balletic waves flow
as aquatic aisles ripple.
Horizon sprawls on the sea.
Then brightens farewell,
golden sun descends to lounge.
Incandescent rays
crawl back in their humble den.
Sun sails away from between . . .
~*~*~
Author notes
continuation of the last line is the the title of the tanka chain ^_^
i hope you got what i mean =]
Tanka:
syllable count: 5-7-5-7-7
comments are appreciated
and it's been a long time
since i wrote a form poetry chain ^^'
guess, that's all.
if there are any mistakes, please point them out n.n
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A contest entry
- TANKA TIME by Swan song.
650 points, ended March 21, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Tell me what you think will make this poem better
Comments
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Great opening use of personification, and the use of descriptive detail throughout. This is a very well crafted poem indeed and you use the form extremely well. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
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Stunning imagery
This is really beautifully...quite something I would write myself...Congrats on the Gold...
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Wow
Excellent. Seemless and superb. Congrats.
Awesome words in the second one.
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This is one awesome Tanka chain well done!!!!!!!!
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