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Comment Please

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A commenting contest
so I need you to say
what you think of this poem,
please do it today.

Some trophies at stake
points on the line too;
when you have read this
you know what to do.

Just leave a few words
let me know what you think,
maybe this poem might
give me reason to drink.

Champagne to you all
I will raise a tall glass,
thanking you very much
here's to you all, en masse. 

Hah, fooled you, I did
no bubbly, at most;
will just drink to your health
with this beer, to the host.

Author notes

Option # 3 for the latest contest -
picture from deviantART - do not know who took it

A contest entry

Please tell me what you think

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  • Sharcu silver member
    September 25

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    I can't say I've read many of your humorous poems, but you definitely have a niche for it. Nice job! I liked the rhyming, humor, and choice of words which all added to your piece nicely. Thanks for the entry

    --Tim


  • Levon
    August 16
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    go Granny! go!


  • Ronztrek gold member
    August 1

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    WOW!

    Wow Grannyeri, I just had to read the 3rd position poem, of most popular poem of all time, now over a quarter million... did I say WOW yet? Just in case:

    "WOW!" way to go ! Congratulations Canadian Poet

    Ron


  • Gratitude
    June 30
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    Haha love the concept! Here's to you and yours, and good luck in the contest!

  • sheltered
    June 8
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    Cheers


  • Mateo the Leo
    June 6
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    sucker punch

  • why smile
    June 2
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    lol i like it its fun

  • jogn
    May 31
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    Nice jingle

    Sounds of chritmas mabye. Still well done.

  • celadia
    April 29
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    This is professional quality, in my opinion, and it is funny, too, it makes it seem like you are joking about asking, clever.

  • Gillett
    April 18
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    I like it - nice tactical ploy!

  • exit-de-jugador
    April 18
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    Man that's funny. LIne 16 is a little too short; another syllable or two would enhance the rythm. Great job!

  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    April 18

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    Not much of a drinker but I"ll accept the beer anyway

    Good luck in the contest.



    . Rewarded 4


  • Coolbreezequis
    April 18

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    You is a HOT MESS, but it was funny and I like your sense of humor. Keep making people laugh but most of all keep a pen in hand and keep on writing poetry!!!

    . Rewarded 4


  • suthrnbell84
    April 18
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    I would prefer the champagne, actually. Lol. But this was a cute poem. I enjoyed reading it.
  • stitchbunny
    April 17
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    comment contest?

    i do like the beer part lots :]

  • Kp.s
    April 17

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    This was a neat idea. I liked it a lot, the only thing is that I stumbled on this stanza:

    Just leave a few words
    let me know what you think,
    maybe this poem might
    give me reason to drink.

    Maybe if you changed it to:

    " "
    " "
    and maybe this poem
    will give me a reason to drink.

    Other than that, it flowed very well; thanks for sharing!
    KP

  • thepoetssoul gold member
    April 17

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    Oh my...this has so many great comments to many to read in a day's timeI thought this poem was very well written,with wonderful rhythm and flow.
    So cheers to you for this exellent penning
    Best of wishes to you

    Tony

    . Rewarded 4


  • isabelwk
    April 17
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    Cute and funny too!

    Great rhythm and flow. Nicely done!


  • DesertRose1
    April 17

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    lol.. funny... i like how it sounds wen read outloud..
    good luck with this eccentric contest!

  • frownsnfreckles
    April 17
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    sorry, just realised I've commented already on this one

  • knitonepearlone
    April 17

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    This is a great idea for an AP poem. The title drew me in and I was pleasantly surprised by your bubbly rhyme.

    . Rewarded 4


  • InkstarRN
    April 17

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    grannyeri, I enjoyed this poem, and it's humor. I always love rhyme. The rhyme and form were perfect for the light hearted tone of this peice. Great job! LOL


  • Cat10
    April 16
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    heehee, so funny! nice write!

  • toomysterious
    April 15
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    Funny, enjoyed the read very much. Thank You.


  • NastyNickie
    April 15

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    awwww, cute, it made me laugh (keep in mind i made a fool out of myself by laughing out loud in a quiet classroom) it's lol fantastic!

  • stani
    April 14

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    hilarious!

    hahahahahahahah! lovely write, lovely play of words! "Just leave a few words
    let me know what you think,
    maybe this poem might
    give me reason to drink." well for what my words are worth, this is a lovely poem and i am glad i came across it, because it got me smiling! nice one!

  • smiley
    April 14

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    Too Cute

    I truly enjoyed this piece... but I do hope that is doesn't drive you to drink. I liked the rhyming and the beer mug on the side.

    Yvonne

    . Rewarded 4


  • DizturbedLove
    April 14

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    Fun Poem!

    I love how playful this was!! Great job. Definitely haven't read one quite like this! Very unique!

    Cute

    Keep up the great work!

    . Rewarded 4


  • SeptemberFaith
    April 14

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    This is cute! I like poems that feel like they are talking to the reader and especially when it is something so fun as this.

    So here is your comment, I have now paid my dues
    I like this here poem, thanks for stimulating my muse

    haha! Okay. So I dont do rhyme, but this just popped into my head. As lame as it is!

    Criss

  • DawnBaby gold member
    April 13
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    Excellent

    Great job on this Grannyeri! Good luck in your contest!

  • dcpoetmusician
    April 13

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    Hahaha. I like this one a lot. I think the mods here at allpoetry should put this on the front page since it pretty much describes what we're all doing here.

  • ears2hearyou gold member
    April 13
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    For you ceaseless focus and determination

    we award you the shining sword of excalibur...for sure
    this poet has the strength of soul to pull it out of
    the hardened stone!
    Way to go...and stay determined granny!
    ears/Seattle.
  • Dee23
    April 13
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    dee23

    I think this was quite funny. i'll drink a toast too. good luck in the contest


  • Frodofan silver member
    April 13

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    Interesting... not sure I understand it though. Is the idea of the contest whoever gets the most comments wins?

    Nice use of the beer emoticon.

    Good luck.

  • alone-n-emo
    April 13
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    i like it.you made it cool. hope you win the contest.


  • OhEmetophobia
    April 13
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    *giggles* What a humorous poem! I really enjoyed it. Good luck in the contest you've entered!

  • Embossed
    April 13
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    Alcoholism. Ain't it wonderful? (I kid!)

    Funnily written.


  • Gwenevere
    April 13
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    I'll leave you a comment'cos it's fair to say
    You'll comment on mine by the end of the day.
    A fun poem.I'll raise my glass with a drop of the red stuff, Cheers!!!!

  • Bizharro
    April 11
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    Haha! Great poem and great rhyme!


  • Amorita Maharaj
    April 11
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    Sweet :)

    Love this poem.... excellent

  • ScottishPrincess silver member
    April 10
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    Now this is just awesome indeed!,made me laugh so hard,I love this!,thank you for the laugh,Hazel

  • maggiejamespoet silver member
    April 10
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    Poem is full of wit and humor. Returning the toast--good health and luck to the writer and readers!


  • Lyrical Rain
    April 10
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    Loved it> thanx for sharing.

  • vampire of thought
    April 10

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    I'd take a beer over Bubbly anyday.

    third stanza, third and fourth lines: seems a little awkward, the flow is just off.

    fourth stanza, third and fourth lines: again, the flow seems off, perhaps if it were "to thank you very much/ here's to you, en masse"...meh..maybe not...

    fifth stanza, third line: there should be and I or something in there, shouldn't there? or a We'll...

    ust my thoughts.

    wow, this just seems rather interesting. Very well done, I don't like rhyme, but you did a good job with it here.

    ~VoT

    . Rewarded 8


  • MidnightPoet545
    April 10
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    Very well written. I love the rhyming in it, it flowed so nicely. Nicely done.

  • genies
    April 10

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    a light-hearted, vivacious, yet written with care. i like the rhyme scheme, the enjambement which makes the poem's texture smooth. The last stanza contains the resolution or a'trickery' and summarizes the whole poem. Cheers

  • HakuoBlake
    April 9
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    love it, its so cute and the rhyming is perfect

  • I will stand by you
    April 9
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    still a great write. I loved how you had a picture to go with it.

  • tortured-heart
    April 9
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    its pretty cute...i like it
    peace, love, & cheese
  • gothgirl08
    April 9
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    i like it, it has a nice rhyme and its cutie
  • lightwing
    April 9
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    Lots of fun with a nice easy rhyme. Good job with the topic; a very tricky one.


  • camille-morin
    April 9
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    Fun! I like it!


  • Trial and Error
    April 9

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    This is rather interesting....I don't know many who could take such a topic and actually write something worthy out of it, but I have to say that you did that

    Good luck in your contest.

  • Miss Masquerade
    April 8
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    I just had to read this poem again, it still brings a smile to my face. I really hope you win this contest.
  • Paradise Prisoner
    April 8
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    hehe..cute


  • craftyangel43
    April 8

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    I thought this was a cool way to get people to check out your poem, which I liked very much. I like the Rhyming. The last part was my favorite Hah, fooled you,I did no bubbly, at most; will just drink to your health with this beer, to the host.
    Good luck

    . Rewarded 6

  • Magic9NiNe9
    April 8
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    RIGHT ON, GOOD WORDS, WELL DONE

  • Eclecta
    April 8
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    Very nice indeed. Best of luck.

  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    April 8

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    I like the rhyme in this. It flows really well. This is written - I feel - tongue-in-cheek. Very creative and wonderful writing.

    Well done
    All the best
    Wayne Leon

    . Rewarded 4


  • Minato Namikaze
    April 7
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    great rhyming really liked it.

  • Mary O gold member
    April 7

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    Cheers! Toasting my Margarita to you as I write. Just what I needed - lighthearted joy to read. Good luck sweetie.
    ~Mary O

  • AmyPixiDust
    April 7
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    i was just reading this agian it makes me laugh to see what kind of comments you have gotten on this poem, good luck in the promotr your best contest, keep writing, -Amy

  • Uasal Laoch Aingeal gold member
    April 7

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    Ha Ha Ha I love it. Thats great. Good rhyme and rythm as well. I wasnt sure what to expect when I read the title but that certainly wasnt it. Thanks for the laugh. Good luck in the contest.

    . Rewarded 4

  • luvdrkchocolate
    April 6

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    lol This is some poem that you've got going on here. You had me laughing. At first with your title I thought it must be a poem that you thought was really important but afterward I saw that it was just because you had to for the contest. Either way, I thought that you're 'desperate' humor was really funny and I liked the last two stanzas the best.

  • AzureBlue
    April 6

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    hahaha! That's so cute!
    Your rhyming works well...something I ALWAYS struggle with...lol. Good luck in the contest!
    Peace,
    Lorena

    . Rewarded 4


  • bird at rose gold member
    April 6

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    A light poem

    I like rhyme, and for this contest especially I think it really fits to spread interest. You have kept the amusement at a good pace throughout. Laughed at "please do it today" because that means don't save it or write it later, it'll take too slow to get all the reviews you need. Stanza #2 is clever, it kind of relates to you having this poem on reward, so you can get them back with an award maybe. Nice careful laughter about simple discipline with beer also. It may be funner that way just with true enjoyment.

    Thanks for sharing, I didn't miss your viewpoint!
    PIA-K

  • CountryCousin
    April 6
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    Beer is.

    Beer is okay too, as the song says, we will raise our glasses to the red, white and blue. With whiskey for the boys and beer for the horses. A Coors lite is just about what I would like sometimes.

  • Miss Masquerade
    April 6

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    best of luck in the contest! this poem manged to bring a smile to my face on a dark day. very witty and clever.

    . Rewarded 4


  • katscradle
    April 6
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    CHUCKLING!!!

    very funhy but interesting good luck in this contest
    my friend


  • the gunslinger
    April 6

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    entertaining

    loved the entire thing, i couldn't beleive it at first but...judging from the number of comments received you've accomplished what you set out for...hmmm...might i get comment number 400?


    edit: hooray I did get # 400!
    kinda renarded thing to be happy for though, eh?

    . Rewarded 4


  • Cupcrazy gold member
    April 6

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    Lovely work hun, I quite enjoyed it. Very lyrical and engaging. Good luck in the contest. Hugs, Bunny

    . Rewarded 4


  • SuicideBride
    April 6

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    Cute

    I liked this poem. The flow of this poem is very fitting. I am not one whom usually looks for poems that rhyme, because when you are continuously searching for the next word to rhyme with the last line, to match the last stanza, the message the poet is trying to send may be altered, or essentially lost in the process. You managed to keep up the flow as well as keep a sense of humor, and your ultimate meaning of the poem. I liked this poem. Better clear of a spot on your mantlepiece, because this poem deserves a shiny for sure!
    Thanks again for sharing this piece with me, and I hope to read more of your work in the future.!
    Ashley [MISTAKE]
    -SuicideBride-

  • Rejected Easter Egg gold member
    April 6

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    wow I didn't think I knew you but then I saw your picture and I think I shared a contest with you....anyways....this is simple yet well written....the ending was probably the best part and the part that will seperate it from all the rest in the contest. Good luck with your writing and I'll be sure to check back to see what other goodies you have up your sleeve.

    Thank you for entering this and writing this so others may enjoy it.

    Sincerely,
    The baby egg.

  • sinnocence
    April 6

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    This piece is great, it made me laugh
    Loved the way it changed in the last stanza.

    Best of luck in the contest.

    - Jojo x sinnocence

  • Angelsojaded
    April 6
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    Very fun

    I am a fan of rhyming poetry and the flow and rhyme was great. Fun !


  • frownsnfreckles
    April 5
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    think I already commented on this one, it was fun!

  • always.a.dream
    April 5
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    Awesome!

    This is very well written. I enjoyed reading it, it was a real treat! Best of luck in the contest!


  • liduen silver member
    April 5

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    Great job! I love the lightness of it. I really enjoyed reading it! Thanks for sharing and I hope you the best of luck in the contest!

    . Rewarded 4

  • whoopie.x
    April 5
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    NICE. i LOVED THE POEM. iT INSPIRED ME DO MUCH KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK! NEVER STOP WRITING


  • motel silver member
    April 4

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    the lightness of the work deserves champagne. great take on the contest ... a poem about commenting. not only does one network thru commenting but much more importantly, one's work becomes invigorated ... always enjoy seeing other points of view. thanks.

    . Rewarded 6


  • Ratatoskr
    April 4

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    Amusement is a drink everyone needs from time to time. Anyways even though you are tricky, this poem was great. Here's to your genius. *raises bottle of Schnaps in the air*

  • lechap
    April 4

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    Nice

    I like how you fooled me into reading this. Great cadence. I will certainly match you on the drink. So heres one to the poet-------, ahh delicious.

  • paperparadox silver member
    April 4

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    Well, the title drew me straight in!

    Great ditty here, with a steady meter and well-rhymed lines.

    Cheers! (hic) (although I prefer !)

    . Rewarded 4


  • Ruvimbo
    April 4

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    Great

    I like the flow of words and the humour. It so easily readable and before you know it you would have read the last line. A masterpiece!

    . Rewarded 4


  • dreamsxcalling
    April 4
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    Hahaha, this really made me smile.


  • x-- lamour detruit
    April 4
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    lol. this was a good read. great flow and whyme scheme. good luck in the contest.


  • poorme
    April 4
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    This really works.Love the flow,and the rhyme is perfect.


  • Little Blue Bird
    April 4
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    Nice

    I like your train of thought. It brought a smile to my face. Thank you for sharing.

  • oldpoets
    April 4

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    leaveit to you to come up with this formatt. It is been a while since I have ccommnted on one of your writes. You just keep getting better and better.

    . Rewarded 4