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Comment Please

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A commenting contest
so I need you to say
what you think of this poem,
please do it today.

Some trophies at stake
points on the line too;
when you have read this
you know what to do.

Just leave a few words
let me know what you think,
maybe this poem might
give me reason to drink.

Champagne to you all
I will raise a tall glass,
thanking you very much
here's to you all, en masse. 

Hah, fooled you, I did
no bubbly, at most;
will just drink to your health
with this beer, to the host.

Author notes

Option # 3 for the latest contest -
picture from deviantART - do not know who took it

A contest entry

Please tell me what you think

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
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    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

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  • lovestinks
    November 11
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    a nice, light hearted read! I liked the fun spin you put on it at the end. thanks for sharing!

  • Nameless-Faceless
    October 3
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    Hah! I like this - the mimicry of people desparate for feedback, but with a light touch. Clever wordplay!

  • catstar
    September 14

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    Wow! This is incredible! Lol. I really enjoyed Reading. It's really funny and I thoroughly it. P.s. I'm glad there was no bubbly, can't stand it. Lol.


  • TerriMac gold member
    August 21
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    Fab!

    What a fab little poem - bottoms up"!

    T

  • mhwillingham
    August 18

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    I like how poetry seems to come so naturally to you (provided that this poem is a sufficient representative for your other works.) I really enjoyed it, it made me laugh.


  • Melee Vau gold member
    August 15
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    cute ending

    toast to you grannyeri


  • marebyte
    August 8
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    Pretty witty there. A toast to an original. I am impressed


  • BrokenAtBest
    August 6

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    That was pretty cool. I liked it alot. Enjoy writing it? Finding poetry in something so ordinary and simple is fantastic to me. It just goes to show something normal can be made into something wonderful. Great write.


  • AllOverItNow
    July 13

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    I have a feeling you really enjoyed writing this, and that extends to the reader and i felt quite light hearted after reading
    'hah, fooled you, i did'

  • Bobby41
    June 19
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    I say HOORAY HOORAY awesome and a little different


  • Gratitude
    June 6
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    Haha, I like! Well done with this... God bless xxx


  • Silver Wolf
    June 4

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    Very kewl!

    I love this! I like to see poems that are serious, but I also like to see ones like this one, that have fun with words, and are done for a purpose, as well...great job!


  • Smurf 08
    June 2

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    Sooo was this strictly to get comments? I mean hey at worst ur getting ur comments for its popularity


  • KissMe123
    May 25
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    lol i don't get it but...it sounds cool haha


  • AuburnBlessing
    May 20
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    I agree with Andrian.


  • AndrianTimeswift
    May 20

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    Alright, since we're taking off all of the masks, I'm putting this comment up for two reasons: #1: Points, I need them, and leaving comments helps. #2: because you asked for it in your poem. I disapprove of drinking, so please stop.

  • katwin
    May 17
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    mmmm-what? lol!


  • white stone
    May 9

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    This is cool, but I have do be honest and say that it makes NO SENSE to me that this is number three most applauded of all time on A.P. That said, have three more.


  • poet-inside-out
    April 3
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    .um.... nice i guess

  • NotSoClueless17
    March 12
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    This poem is very weird in a good way

  • Bassem
    March 10
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    A Neat Poem!

    You have made yourself an original and cool poem. I'll drink to that!


  • Echos in Silence
    January 19
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    lol i like it


  • Andrew Norris
    January 5

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    Sorry, but somewhat bland and predictable. Try looking at other poetic forms other than 4 line stanzas and that dum di dum di dum rhythm. Congratulations on the popularity, though, very telling. Regards


  • DylanBloodlust
    December 18, 2008
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    Nice, funny and wants to be commented, so I'll comment on it! xD


  • Zombiefreak13
    November 24, 2008
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    very funny haha


  • Rhythm Child
    October 20, 2008
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    nice


  • Sharcu silver member
    September 25, 2008

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    I can't say I've read many of your humorous poems, but you definitely have a niche for it. Nice job! I liked the rhyming, humor, and choice of words which all added to your piece nicely. Thanks for the entry

    --Tim


  • Levon
    August 16, 2008
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    go Granny! go!


  • Ronztrek
    August 1, 2008

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    WOW!

    Wow Grannyeri, I just had to read the 3rd position poem, of most popular poem of all time, now over a quarter million... did I say WOW yet? Just in case:

    "WOW!" way to go ! Congratulations Canadian Poet

    Ron

  • Gratitude
    June 30, 2008
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    Haha love the concept! Here's to you and yours, and good luck in the contest!


  • sheltered
    June 8, 2008
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    Cheers


  • edgar allen matt
    June 6, 2008
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    sucker punch


  • callmeZakk
    June 2, 2008
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    lol i like it its fun


  • jogn
    May 31, 2008
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    Nice jingle

    Sounds of chritmas mabye. Still well done.

  • celadia
    April 29, 2008
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    This is professional quality, in my opinion, and it is funny, too, it makes it seem like you are joking about asking, clever.


  • Gillett
    April 18, 2008
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    I like it - nice tactical ploy!


  • Mr Violet
    April 18, 2008
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    Man that's funny. LIne 16 is a little too short; another syllable or two would enhance the rythm. Great job!

  • Suzanne Dia
    April 18, 2008

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    Not much of a drinker but I"ll accept the beer anyway

    Good luck in the contest.




  • StarstruckWriter
    April 18, 2008

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    You is a HOT MESS, but it was funny and I like your sense of humor. Keep making people laugh but most of all keep a pen in hand and keep on writing poetry!!!


  • suthrnbell84
    April 18, 2008
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    I would prefer the champagne, actually. Lol. But this was a cute poem. I enjoyed reading it.

  • stitchbunny
    April 17, 2008
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    comment contest?

    i do like the beer part lots :]


  • Kp.s
    April 17, 2008

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    This was a neat idea. I liked it a lot, the only thing is that I stumbled on this stanza:

    Just leave a few words
    let me know what you think,
    maybe this poem might
    give me reason to drink.

    Maybe if you changed it to:

    " "
    " "
    and maybe this poem
    will give me a reason to drink.

    Other than that, it flowed very well; thanks for sharing!
    KP


  • thepoetssoul
    April 17, 2008

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    Oh my...this has so many great comments to many to read in a day's timeI thought this poem was very well written,with wonderful rhythm and flow.
    So cheers to you for this exellent penning
    Best of wishes to you

    Tony


  • isabelwk
    April 17, 2008
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    Cute and funny too!

    Great rhythm and flow. Nicely done!


  • DesertRose1
    April 17, 2008

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    lol.. funny... i like how it sounds wen read outloud..
    good luck with this eccentric contest!


  • frownsnfreckles
    April 17, 2008
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    sorry, just realised I've commented already on this one


  • knitonepearlone
    April 17, 2008

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    This is a great idea for an AP poem. The title drew me in and I was pleasantly surprised by your bubbly rhyme.


  • Tamera
    April 17, 2008

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    grannyeri, I enjoyed this poem, and it's humor. I always love rhyme. The rhyme and form were perfect for the light hearted tone of this peice. Great job! LOL


  • Cat10
    April 16, 2008
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    heehee, so funny! nice write!


  • toomysterious
    April 15, 2008
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    Funny, enjoyed the read very much. Thank You.


  • NastyNickie
    April 15, 2008

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    awwww, cute, it made me laugh (keep in mind i made a fool out of myself by laughing out loud in a quiet classroom) it's lol fantastic!


  • stani
    April 14, 2008

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    hilarious!

    hahahahahahahah! lovely write, lovely play of words! "Just leave a few words
    let me know what you think,
    maybe this poem might
    give me reason to drink." well for what my words are worth, this is a lovely poem and i am glad i came across it, because it got me smiling! nice one!


  • smiley
    April 14, 2008

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    Too Cute

    I truly enjoyed this piece... but I do hope that is doesn't drive you to drink. I liked the rhyming and the beer mug on the side.

    Yvonne


  • DizturbedLove
    April 14, 2008

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    Fun Poem!

    I love how playful this was!! Great job. Definitely haven't read one quite like this! Very unique!

    Cute

    Keep up the great work!


  • SeptemberFaith
    April 14, 2008

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    This is cute! I like poems that feel like they are talking to the reader and especially when it is something so fun as this.

    So here is your comment, I have now paid my dues
    I like this here poem, thanks for stimulating my muse

    haha! Okay. So I dont do rhyme, but this just popped into my head. As lame as it is!

    Criss


  • DawnBaby
    April 13, 2008
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    Excellent

    Great job on this Grannyeri! Good luck in your contest!


  • dcpoetmusician
    April 13, 2008

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    Hahaha. I like this one a lot. I think the mods here at allpoetry should put this on the front page since it pretty much describes what we're all doing here.


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    April 13, 2008
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    For you ceaseless focus and determination

    we award you the shining sword of excalibur...for sure
    this poet has the strength of soul to pull it out of
    the hardened stone!
    Way to go...and stay determined granny!
    ears/Seattle.

  • Dee23
    April 13, 2008
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    dee23

    I think this was quite funny. i'll drink a toast too. good luck in the contest


  • Frodofan silver member
    April 13, 2008

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    Interesting... not sure I understand it though. Is the idea of the contest whoever gets the most comments wins?

    Nice use of the beer emoticon.

    Good luck.


  • Synester16Gates
    April 13, 2008
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    i like it.you made it cool. hope you win the contest.


  • broken-colours
    April 13, 2008
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    *giggles* What a humorous poem! I really enjoyed it. Good luck in the contest you've entered!


  • Embossed
    April 13, 2008
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    Alcoholism. Ain't it wonderful? (I kid!)

    Funnily written.


  • Gwenevere
    April 13, 2008
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    I'll leave you a comment'cos it's fair to say
    You'll comment on mine by the end of the day.
    A fun poem.I'll raise my glass with a drop of the red stuff, Cheers!!!!


  • Bizharro
    April 11, 2008
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    Haha! Great poem and great rhyme!


  • Amorita Maharaj
    April 11, 2008
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    Sweet :)

    Love this poem.... excellent


  • ScottishPrincess silver member
    April 10, 2008
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    Now this is just awesome indeed!,made me laugh so hard,I love this!,thank you for the laugh,Hazel


  • maggiejamespoet silver member
    April 10, 2008
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    Poem is full of wit and humor. Returning the toast--good health and luck to the writer and readers!


  • Lyrical Rain
    April 10, 2008
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    Loved it> thanx for sharing.


  • vampire of thought
    April 10, 2008

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    I'd take a beer over Bubbly anyday.

    third stanza, third and fourth lines: seems a little awkward, the flow is just off.

    fourth stanza, third and fourth lines: again, the flow seems off, perhaps if it were "to thank you very much/ here's to you, en masse"...meh..maybe not...

    fifth stanza, third line: there should be and I or something in there, shouldn't there? or a We'll...

    ust my thoughts.

    wow, this just seems rather interesting. Very well done, I don't like rhyme, but you did a good job with it here.

    ~VoT


  • MidnightPoet545
    April 10, 2008
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    Very well written. I love the rhyming in it, it flowed so nicely. Nicely done.


  • genies
    April 10, 2008

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    a light-hearted, vivacious, yet written with care. i like the rhyme scheme, the enjambement which makes the poem's texture smooth. The last stanza contains the resolution or a'trickery' and summarizes the whole poem. Cheers


  • HakuoBlake
    April 9, 2008
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    love it, its so cute and the rhyming is perfect


  • I will stand by you
    April 9, 2008
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    still a great write. I loved how you had a picture to go with it.


  • tortured-heart
    April 9, 2008
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    its pretty cute...i like it
    peace, love, & cheese

  • gothgirl08
    April 9, 2008
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    i like it, it has a nice rhyme and its cutie

  • lightwing
    April 9, 2008
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    Lots of fun with a nice easy rhyme. Good job with the topic; a very tricky one.


  • Camille Morin gold member
    April 9, 2008
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    Fun! I like it!


  • Trial and Error
    April 9, 2008

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    This is rather interesting....I don't know many who could take such a topic and actually write something worthy out of it, but I have to say that you did that

    Good luck in your contest.


  • Mistress Masquerade
    April 8, 2008
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    I just had to read this poem again, it still brings a smile to my face. I really hope you win this contest.

  • Paradise Prisoner
    April 8, 2008
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    hehe..cute


  • craftyangel43
    April 8, 2008

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    I thought this was a cool way to get people to check out your poem, which I liked very much. I like the Rhyming. The last part was my favorite Hah, fooled you,I did no bubbly, at most; will just drink to your health with this beer, to the host.
    Good luck

  • Magic9NiNe9
    April 8, 2008
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    RIGHT ON, GOOD WORDS, WELL DONE


  • SchizoChic
    April 8, 2008
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    Very nice indeed. Best of luck.


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    April 8, 2008

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    I like the rhyme in this. It flows really well. This is written - I feel - tongue-in-cheek. Very creative and wonderful writing.

    Well done
    All the best
    Wayne Leon


  • AssumingRain
    April 7, 2008
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    great rhyming really liked it.


  • Mary O gold member
    April 7, 2008

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    Cheers! Toasting my Margarita to you as I write. Just what I needed - lighthearted joy to read. Good luck sweetie.
    ~Mary O


  • peridotPixi
    April 7, 2008
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    i was just reading this agian it makes me laugh to see what kind of comments you have gotten on this poem, good luck in the promotr your best contest, keep writing, -Amy


  • SomeonesToySoldier gold member
    April 7, 2008

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    Ha Ha Ha I love it. Thats great. Good rhyme and rythm as well. I wasnt sure what to expect when I read the title but that certainly wasnt it. Thanks for the laugh. Good luck in the contest.

  • luvdrkchocolate
    April 6, 2008

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    lol This is some poem that you've got going on here. You had me laughing. At first with your title I thought it must be a poem that you thought was really important but afterward I saw that it was just because you had to for the contest. Either way, I thought that you're 'desperate' humor was really funny and I liked the last two stanzas the best.


  • AzureBlue gold member
    April 6, 2008

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    hahaha! That's so cute!
    Your rhyming works well...something I ALWAYS struggle with...lol. Good luck in the contest!
    Peace,
    Lorena


  • bird at rose
    April 6, 2008

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    A light poem

    I like rhyme, and for this contest especially I think it really fits to spread interest. You have kept the amusement at a good pace throughout. Laughed at "please do it today" because that means don't save it or write it later, it'll take too slow to get all the reviews you need. Stanza #2 is clever, it kind of relates to you having this poem on reward, so you can get them back with an award maybe. Nice careful laughter about simple discipline with beer also. It may be funner that way just with true enjoyment.

    Thanks for sharing, I didn't miss your viewpoint!
    PIA-K


  • CountryCousin
    April 6, 2008
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    Beer is.

    Beer is okay too, as the song says, we will raise our glasses to the red, white and blue. With whiskey for the boys and beer for the horses. A Coors lite is just about what I would like sometimes.


  • Mistress Masquerade
    April 6, 2008

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    best of luck in the contest! this poem manged to bring a smile to my face on a dark day. very witty and clever.


  • katscradle
    April 6, 2008
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    CHUCKLING!!!

    very funhy but interesting good luck in this contest
    my friend


  • the gunslinger
    April 6, 2008

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    entertaining

    loved the entire thing, i couldn't beleive it at first but...judging from the number of comments received you've accomplished what you set out for...hmmm...might i get comment number 400?


    edit: hooray I did get # 400!
    kinda renarded thing to be happy for though, eh?


  • Cupcrazy gold member
    April 6, 2008

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    Lovely work hun, I quite enjoyed it. Very lyrical and engaging. Good luck in the contest. Hugs, Bunny


  • SuicideBride
    April 6, 2008

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    Cute

    I liked this poem. The flow of this poem is very fitting. I am not one whom usually looks for poems that rhyme, because when you are continuously searching for the next word to rhyme with the last line, to match the last stanza, the message the poet is trying to send may be altered, or essentially lost in the process. You managed to keep up the flow as well as keep a sense of humor, and your ultimate meaning of the poem. I liked this poem. Better clear of a spot on your mantlepiece, because this poem deserves a shiny for sure!
    Thanks again for sharing this piece with me, and I hope to read more of your work in the future.!
    Ashley [MISTAKE]
    -SuicideBride-

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