I told thee, Theodora,
I loved thy Theremin;
Thou sleepest in Sonora –
it lieth well within
Thy grasp. Thine eyes adore a
wraith’s image, thrawn and thin.
I told thee, Theodora,
I loved thy Theremin.
They’re there, O Theodora,
thine eyes, thy throat, thy chin;
Their breadth – oh I implore a
respite from sloth and sin –
Their height exceedeth, more a
thought that they there begin…
They’re there, O Theodora,
thine eyes, thy throat, thy chin.
There, there, my Theodora,
my deathless Paladin,
Lay down thy harp, ignore a
yen for thy Theremin;
Thereafter and before a
brief breath is sucked within…
There, there, my Theodora,
my deathless Paladin.
Thou thinkest not, O Gaia,
that Death hath thrilled the air.
Thy thralls upon the playa,
that pass Thanksgiving there,
Their thrones of wrath and fire –
they're scattered here and there!
Thou thinkest not, O Gaia,
that Death hath thrilled the air.
Author notes
I hope you're really not counting, because I just loved having fun with words and sounds, and darn how many times I used "there", "their", and "they're".
In a list
A contest entry
- How Many Times Can You Use These Words Correctly? by AliceinPoetryLand.
1100 points, ended March 11, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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lmao - wonderful entry here! (despite the fact that I don't do old English very well
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I entered that one as well - obviously not half as brilliantly as you have! Am in complete agreement with the judge on this one - it was amazing and so deserving of the gold - congrats!
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Thank you
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Wow. That's a lot of "There's" "Their's" and "they're's!" This reminds me of Greek mythology or something. Congrats on the shiny.
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Indeed it is - which was the whole point of the contest
Thanks for the visit and the congratulations.
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Loved it!!
Congrats on the Gold, this is beautiful, my friend.
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Thank you.
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This is so clever - glad to see the Gold on this one - can't imagine anyone beating it. Learned a new word too - "thrawn" I see that it's Scottish.
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It has Old English origins, but is almost extinct in dialect, except for its retention in the Scots tongue. We might still say "drawn" in modern English and be close in meaning. Glad you liked it.
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mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm
Forget about the meaning read aloud and listen
mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm
get the idea?
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Yeah, I got the message, Jeff.
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Very unusual entry - all that old English makes it quite unique - need someone with a good accent to read this one out loud!
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I had Patrick Stewart in mind, or Helen Mirren preferably.
Thanks for the comments.
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The meter provides provide for a wonderful sing-songy flow which just slips and rolls off the tongue!The archaic words were well woven and while I often feel that they affect they flow, that wasn't the case here What is adorable is that you actually managed to weave a story withing the their and they're lol...Wonderful work and good luck in the contest
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Thanks! You've got to know what you're doing with archaic language, or the result can be terrible. Years of reading the Bible and Shakespeare did it for me.
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Ah!lol
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I'm dizzy! Great.
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Nice to know I spun you around a little, Allan. Thanks.
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Surprising use of words... works beautifully
Your elegant poem flows like a silver satin ribbon and is enchanting throughout.
Wondrous use of rhyme and rhythm and the result is lovely.
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Glad it pleases you, Marilynn.
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Wow! This is just amazing! How trul;y clever and in so short a time
Stunning entry and imagery in this and all your words put in the correct place
Thanks so much for your entry.
Gaylene
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Hi Gaylene - I just kicked back and let the stuff flow. I had fun, and that's the main thing. Glad you liked it. I spotted your contest and thought "My, my... there's something I can sharpen my quill on!"
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