I am a blind man falling in love
Wondering how the touch of your skin feels like
Its scent, shade and softness…
I am a deaf man falling in love
Straining my ears to hear your every single word
Every whisper, sigh and laughter…
I am a lame man falling in love
Incapable of walking and holding you in my arms
and waltz to either of our favourite tunes…
I am a dumb man falling in love
With thoughts inside my head and can’t speak
words I want to whisper in your ears…
I am a complete handicap in love
longing to touch, listen and feel you completely…
Author notes
Option 1
This poem is for my girl Meliza. We communicated from a distance before we met in person. This is how I felt in those days about her...
A contest entry
- Expressing Your Feelings by Judo.
700 points, ended March 23, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wow! You've left me speechless yet again man! Hahaha. Amazing! Congrats on the HM
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this got an HM? when? I didnt even know it!!!
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Hahaha! Well, you know now!
Now say Yay! Hahaha
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lol! yeah, didnt even remember it was entered in a contest! ...er getting old!
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Good multiple image love poem!
WOW! You set up a few very fine short metaphors in this very good, short romantic poem. I like it because you speak so well in these short three line stanzas! Very good title and last line! Can't see how I'd improve it! Very good work, friend! Is English your native tongue?
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Wow--an honest and heartfelt write---
congratulations on the well-deserved award!
well Done!
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An emotive and emotional piece highlighting the frustrations (both mental and physical) of love at a distance. Also a reminder of how tongue-tied and fumble-brained love can make us anyway.
(Judo) This is not an Adult theme it is an ageless theme just as life, death and taxes are, and it has only the overtones that the reader brings to it themselves.
Apart from substituting what for how in line 2 I feel it is a fine well-crafted piece.
Jim
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Great poem, but I'm not so sure. I believe I made it clear; NO ADULT THEMES;. I let this one pass, but in the future, make sure you read the rules or don't write about anything too sexual. Very well written, though. I don't think it matters WHAT you are, when you're in love. It matters WHO you are. Your personalities, qualities, characteristics, and etc. Very best of luck in the contest and Meliza. I'm quite positive she would appreciate this lovely poem.
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This is a great poem.
Before I read your author notes I thought that you were referring to the way that some people can get close to someone and truly love them but have no way to express it. It's like a blind man looking at the stars, you know that they're beautiful, but you can't put it into words. -
Bravo!
My favorite Lencio is when he is in love!!!!
This is beautifully written and a joy to read.
It makes me feel like spring really is coming.
'I am a complete handicap in love
longing to touch, listen and feel you completely…'
How joyful youre words are....Jane
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Good Lord, when did you visit this page, seems like I just missed you. I have just returned from Goa, 4 days ago and met Meliza for the first time after 6 months. She and I are marrying in December the 26th. Would be a good time for you to visit us, We could all have a wonderful Christmas and wedding!
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