veins dripping their dependency
staining the hardwood floors
how high can the lowly soul reach
escaping the demon's loving embrace
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Noah20Tymatal
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A contest entry
- ~Anything goes~ by Lavender Butterfly.
390 points, ended March 11, 2008, 17 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - FOR MY FAMILY , FRIENDS! AND EVERYONE ELSE---COME ENTER PW--PW--PW--ENTER . GOLD gets 1,000 points by echo-ink.
1450 points, ended October 16, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
GIVE ME YOUR HONEST REACTION
Comments
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oh wow another deep write, I love your style
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a very sad write you have written here. only the demon's embrace is not a loving one. Love,
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brilliant the demon in the veins mmm has so many implications very thought provking read congrats on the gold
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i see why this won trophies. i like power in a punch. and you do that with these 4 lines. well done.
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It was good for a very short poem. I think we can all relate to something that this poem might apply to. I'm sure this touched a lot of people.
P.S., meant to put 3 but now it won't let me. It's always good to have points, sorry!
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This makes me think of my sister. She is trapped with addiction
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Very well said in very few words. The multiple trophies on this one are well deserved. My own 'high' when I was low was alcohol. I can appreciate this poem.
Mike
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Thanks Mike for your time and comment and thank you also for sharing your heart and life. You are greatly appreciated!
In God's Love
Noah
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Before plummeting down into its cold arms.
Vivid!
Peace Georgia -
I see this as someone looking in on someone who is loved and using drugs.
The lines that said "how high can the lowly soul reach" a sympathetic regard and concern for the peson who is using drugs. A heartfelt anguish caused to the person who knows... perhaps a loved one is using.
"escaping the demons silent embrace" As seen through the eyes of one who is hurting for the user, as the demon drug embraces their loved one.
Perhaps a high for the user and a welcome embrace, but a definate low for the one who loves the user and watches the demon recklesly embrace their loved one.
Few words with a lot of meaning and feeling, I think the poem is just right and could not be any better than it is.
Very welll written dear poet.
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You have amazingly captured a strong sense of addiction in such a poigantly succint way. Reading the comments it befuddles me how such a straight forward write could be so misunderstood. I thought ya hit the nail on the head here, no pun intended.
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It was okay a little short ,i had to reread it a couple of time to get it but i like it. Congrats on the trophy
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At first, I have to reread this. The figurative language first time reading it confuses me, leaving me not completely sure what your point is, but after reading it a few more times, the confusion becomes power. This is a strong write, brief but meaningful. I can see why you won a bronze medal.
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short but powerful, really nice and neat. congrats on the trophy...
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i enjoyed it
you do put quite strong words in there,
and sometimes you don't need the big words to paint the same picture, but it still painted one for me and, being in the same boat, gave me a bit of recent history.
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very few words, yet totally understood. powerful and strong! i loved it!
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Very deep and powerfully written, yet few words, good job.
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Awesome!
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I loved it
Amazing job you are better then me but that is not that hard I am still new. good luck in the contest
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Good write best to you in the contest.
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A lot of expression within this piece. I can see why this won a trophy. This piece is very deep and full of emotion. It is brilliantly-written.
Well done indeed.
Wayne Leon
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Your words express so well, the emotion of elevating ourselves up out of the darkness, away from the demons influence.
Congrats on the Bronze!
Ethereal One
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Congrates on the bronze brother. Well inscribed and expressed piece.
Thanks for sharing, keep up the great works. peace.
-Timothy
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This is absolutely beautiful!, your words definately give meaning to this picture. Congrats on the bronze, yet I say...it should have been Gold!
Blessings,
Sassy
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Beautiful! I love what you have compossed here, and it has such a depth and many emotions. Wonderfully done..keep it up!
Congrats on bronze, you deserved it!
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How immensely thought provoking and deeply profound... x Thanks ever so much for sharing this and many blessings to you too... x Lavender Butterfly.
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The picture is beautiful. It goes well with the poem. Its a very beautiful write. I liked it very much. Keep up the good job.
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caught between two worlds and loved by both...how high can the lowly soul reach!...sighs...very good and so well written Niaish my Nia for sharing with me
otc
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