You've ruined everything
I have no choice on anything
You don't even care anymore
like you did before
so what if I still love him
It's not your business to push him off the limb
you've never even met
why can't you both forget
I still love him and I don't care
even if he thinks I didn't kiss you for a dare
but he said goodbye
with a tear in his eye
he's coming back when your gone
I hope thats not long
he didn't want to go
I don't want you to fight so
he left but he'll be back
thats a fact
you should know I can take care of myself
I don't need your help
I know he didn't want to leave
that was quite obvious when he kissed me
you have changed and so have I
you never hug me anymore when I cry
now that he's gone all I have is you
but you're different now too
you don't care anymore
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Sounds like it feels all unworth it, just playing somekind of unwanted game, foolish game with hearts and sharp objects.
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Oh, man, I've been through this. But I married my substitute love at 19 (don't do this!!). They will always know they are second in your heart. I envy your depth of understanding at such a young age (I am also jealous that you live in my former home, CA. Toronto Rocks).
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this is a great write. It kind of reminds me of my parents and my fiance. They don't approve of him but they haven't met him yet. Keep up the great work.
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Woah...
Woah...this is really complex...old flame verses new love...just...amazing! And you captured it so well!!
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this is really good Shelbsta, sounds a little bit like my life. Ha. Nvm LOL
Im CRAZY!! LOVE YEA
Kristen
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Lots of emotion comes through in this poem. I really like it. I just feel a need to know the rest of the story. I wanted the whole true love happily ever after ending I guess. Thanks for sharing.
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Wonderful, job here on this
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This poem is very good. i can really relate to it. I like the line You should know i can take care of myself. well written i think keep it up.
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i think u should correct a couple of things like this
You've ruined everything
I have no choice on anything
You don't even care anymore
like you did before
so what if I still love him
It's not your business to push him off the limb
you've never even met
why can't you both forget
I still love him and I don't care
even if he thinks I didn't kiss you for a dare
but he said goodbye
with tears in his eyes
he's coming back when your gone
I hope thats not long
he didn't want to go
I don't want you to fight so
he left but he'll be back
thats a fact
you should know I can take care of myself
I don't need your help
I know he didn't want to leave
that was quite obvious when he kissed me good-bye
you have changed and so have I
you never hug me anymore when I cry
now that he's gone all I have is you
but you're different now too
you don't care anymore
And thats what hurts me so very much
but i just want you to hear my comments its not my poem or my story/life but im just tryin to help but you dont have to its your poem/story
ok peace out
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I really like the emotional depth of the poem. Iit shows your true emotion. Who is it about? Not Travis is it?
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This poem is very true. It is about a very close friend who hated my x-boyfriend and tries to control me.
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