Exhausted wonder,
draped in black roses,
smelling like a lavender sea,
awaiting precious dreams,
lost in time's realm of sleep.
Author notes
Write me something absolutely brilliant
(No fancy words)
20 words or less
Too many sleepless nights.....
A contest entry
- ~Anything goes~ by Lavender Butterfly.
390 points, ended March 11, 2008, 17 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrites Mania by Celticmoon.
450 points, ended March 30, 2008, 84 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - SHORT POEMS PART 2 by Blooming Poet.
700 points, ended March 23, 2008, 129 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please critique my work if you feel this needs improving
Comments
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Very nice, appealing to the sensory images of color and smell and feeling... Well deserving of the recognition! A beautiful penning...
Ken
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wow. ur use of words is beyond breathtaking. this is abeautiful artwork of words and images.
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Well done here...silver well deserved.
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Wow, Exhausted wonder is a brillant phrase especially draped in balc roses to start off this amazing little poem.
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Advise
I the third and fourth lines, I think if you were to remove the commas, that the flow would make more sense than in its current lighthearted form now -
very nice
very nice write for the prompt . . liked "Exhausted wonder" and "lost in time's realm of sleep" . . congrats on the trophy
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Yes my Evil Sister a beautiful write exceeding worthiness of its reward. Congratulations on a excellent work of art and the nice shinny.
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Thank you brother, I'm glad you liked it!
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This is thoroughly breathtaking and so divine. Off to the finals you go... x Thanks ever so much for sharing this and many blessings to you too... x Lavender Butterfly.
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I enjoyed this... I know all about sleepless nights... I stay up late working on homework all of the time. Thank goodness its spring break. well... I wish you good luck in the contest.
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