You keep me here,
Chained in this desolate chamber,
Shackled in darkness,
Nothing around me not even a sound,
Alone & naked & ashamed I sit
Wondering if there is any end
to this bullshit.
I am falling apart piece by piece,
Little by little,
Losing myself fading away,
Slowly being replaced with
Nothing but only
Stained Memories
Etched in your mind,
As my soul leaves you behind...
ONLY THEN
Will I be truly
FREE AT LAST!!
Author notes
image credit: Bondage Angel by ~Baby-girl82
http://allpoetry.com/Iridessa%20MoonFlower
A contest entry
- Picture Inspired Contest! by Cerulean Sunrise.
475 points, ended March 11, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Honourable Mentions Only! by amaranthine lover.
775 points, ended January 22, 63 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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wow
this imprisonment was o severe and welldescribed... that one only wonders why it was inflicted...guess you were rseponding to aprpompt...nice done poem like dit -
Umn wow! I have so felt this way many of times before. Wonderful wording with this.
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this is well expressed thanks so much for sharing
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this..
should have been gold..it's sad and dark..but so well written you feel the pain and despair..love this my friend..
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Powerfully written words. Bound by shackles and chains, but yearning to be free. This is a dark take on the prompt. Well done and congratulations on the HM.
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Love It !
Not only is this poem written well but it is very well expressed. And sadley but true , I feel that this is how you are feeling way down deep inside at this very time ! I am very Impresed how it all flows and fits togeather so smoothly....... Blessing's Be To You Alway's , Brenda Gae -
Wow. This is really a great write. I love it when I can read something that just jumps off of the page and hits me in my heart. It's very moving. I loved it.
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You deserved honorable montion.You should have won I think.So lost and alone.My heart breaks for her.a prisioner with no hope.Just makes you want to cry and yell at the same time.Great writing here and the title was well chosen.Thank for the chance to get to read this.
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This is one of my favorite poems I have written
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Wonderfully Weitten My Friend !
You did an excellent job on this one girlfriend,I like it,I love it ,and would really like to see and read more of it like this !!!! There are not enough word's to express just how much this poem is so very wonderful....And this I truely mean.............One of your best this I may say,,,,,,, And Congradulation's On Your Trophy.You Desirved Gold,Or At Least, Silver !!!! Brenda Gae
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wow i love this poem cuz i know what you mean to feel so taped
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i love this poem very much
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wonderful
I can feel your pain and desolation through this. Thanks for sharing. The picture was perfect. I love it!! -
This was excellent. The picture helped endorse the message.
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Mmm beautiful the flow and the feeling of the poem fit well, I doubt there is one poet here, who has not felt captive to a memory, or the pain of one. I love the way you created the feelings on page... I loved the background as well.
later
Romeo
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Your poems speaks a strong message, hon'. It's good; deserved the HM.
As for the color of your text, white font is better suited for this background rather than the red. Some people find that red and black (not to mention the grey patterns in the mix) clashes. Some people can find this distracting, therefore making it hard to read.
If you really want to keep the red font though, you can color highlight your poem using the enriched editing features on your edit poem page so that the background doesn't hinder reading. -
great write!
darkness abounds within this write, sounds to me like it could be a metaphor for within a dark mind...
i've got a contest up, check it out!
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Good write here
So often when we try so hard to make another love us when they had no ententions other than to take what they pleased they also in turn tries to sour the heart to any other love you may ever have for they make you feel worthless .But if one ever makes you feel less than you know you are run away run away as fast as you can for there is only one you and that person is so filled with love that is so deserved by only one who treats you with respect and kindness .
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Creative spin on the picture prompt. Liked the flow and the darkness of these words - sad that only death will bring freedom.
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Distracting background. But the poem is wonderful. Thanks for writing!
Be Well
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great take on the prompt, and lovely strong powerful words. i like the backgorund but it's a little distracting from the poem. great write
good luck
take care
stephanie =)
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